Mad Scientist

This is a very different novel atleast for me. It is very interesting, different from the usual cultivation novels. I haven't seen much of cliche scenes in this novel. Also I felt the ideas are unique and refreshing. So what we have is a scientist who is a self proclaimed the most evil person. This is related to his promise to his parents(father I guess, I dont remember). He thinks he is evil but he isn't. He dedicates most of his life to research and acting evil to the world. While he was going to succeed in his experiment on the verge of death he got transported to another world. He has a secret which he himself doesn't know 100% about it. That secret saved him twice but MC never knew about it and even after the secret perished MC is still ignorant. Now MC is stumbling here and there, trying to adjust to this new world. He finds it a little difficult since everything is so technologically backward but advanced in cultivation which is completely new to MC. MC is living on loan meaning he has to earn life everyday else he would die once the days go down to 0. MC has a system helps him quite a lot but doesn't make him OP. This novel isn't like other system novels where you have an MC going to new world and just accepts everything where his personality takes a 360 degree turn due to his transmigration, getting a system and killing stuff mindlessly to become the most OP character. MC has to go step by step, learn everything starting from the most basic thing. He has to grow in all aspects. And the most imp thing is MC is scared of woman so you can see panicking around woman. This is his flaw from his previous world. MC views everything curiously and values knowledge a lot. All in all I feel this story has great potential. Updates are stable. Characters are well made. Writing style is good. Grammar is well above average. World building isn't introduced much as MC doesn't have the most basic knowledge about everything yet. Keep going author

Although I could see Bai Jie enthusiasm to grow strong, probably in order to get revenge, he's too dependent on the system. I wish he could grow outside of the A.I. Minion is a dear savage. Bai Jie should be roasted by him too. I like that Yiying is assertive of Bai Jie's shortcomings. Also, a character I adore is Ming Xue. She's good at taking care of other people, such a cutie. Bai Jie is a crafty fellow and at the same time, so wary of people. It's a good characteristic for someone who wants to be a mad scientist. The integration of cell mutation with an A.I. system is quite unique. However, it seems that their direct effect on each other was not detailed properly, adding to the matter of cultivation. Thus, proving to be confusing sometimes. I'm looking forward to your in-depth explanation on the matter regarding this, since it's a very important aspect of the story. I'm still wondering if the parasites are quick to learn or not? They should've learned cultivation in the window of coma for Bai Jie. (By the way, the most inactive part of the brain is an obsolete way of saying it. The Brain uses different parts in every action that we take, so the parts are dominant when not in use. However, there are inactive neurons and cells. ) [[[ The following are comments regarding the Technicalities of writing. Please dismiss it if you like.]]] I can see why you don't prefer my way of writing. You have such a straightforward way of narrating things. There are people who will opt to read yours rather than mine because this novel is easier to read. You go straight into action. As opposed to my detailed style of writing, you're inclined to leave it to the reader's imagination with such simple descriptions. That is also your style of writing, so I won't say anything bad about it. Now, there are a myriad of comma splices, run-ons, lack of conjunctions, forgotten capitalizations, and misuse and absence of punctuation marks. These mistakes in grammar cuts the flow of your sentences, making it look like the progression is hasty. There are also several questionable word choices and redundancy. If you would like me to point it out, just please tell me. I will take my time in pointing them out, so you'll be able to proofread them. I'm not pointing out your grammar mistakes out of spite. I want you to improve since this story of yours has an even better way to narrate it, and that is to edit it with the proper use of grammar. You have a very good setting and plot. I've seen your improvements regarding technicals over the course of reading the chapters. I hope that you will continue writing this since there are a lot of people who will like it. I'll be cheering you on. Thank you for the effort you've given in reviewing my work. I am also asking for an apology apropos my misbehaviour. Again, thank you so much. p.s. You might gather readers who aren't familiar with the world of cultivation. I suggest that you incorporate some explanations along the way, so they'll know.

Ahh the irony of an 'evil scientist' Will update this as I read further. So far, the story is looking pretty good, garnered my interest :) So far in the earlier chapters, they need a few edits for punctuations and etc to better the flow and readability, though even without the edits it's still readable and understandable.