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Aspiring Writer of Fantasy and Adventure. Looking out of my window and creating the world of my Dreams. Otherwise sitting at home eating chips

2017-12-29 Joined South Africa

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An incredibly average story at best. Pros: -Stable Updates -Decent translation quality -System has a few unique ideas to it (This system doesn't shove information into the MC's head, it merely provides an independant space for MC to learn with trial and error. Bit OP in some aspects but not unbelievably so) Can live with: -MC can feel insufferably humble. (Never takes full ownership of his achievements) -Military superiors can get annoyingly fawning over MC, which feeds above point -How the system gathers points becomes inconsistent as the story progresses. -Story is pretty white bread. (Have problem, solve problem, receive praise, get new problem, repeat. Problems just get incremently larger) -Despite alternate Earth, seriously pro-China. (Full of Comrade this, and "all I do is for China") Cons: -World building is wonky. (Otherworldy Spirit energy/cultivation crashed into earth and found weapons, must use these to cultivate properly. China is split into Nine Provinces, compete in technology and leveled power and even discriminate against each other despite barely surviving an on-going war against other-worldly invaders) -Most Characters are just a set of generic personality traits What made me drop: The author of this novel seems to have completely forgotten his timeline. By all accounts at the begining of the story, the MC is implied to be a fairly young man as he is finishing his Academy life; so you can assume he is around 20-22. After his time in the academy he joins a research unit, and is given the goal of making 3 tech breakthroughs in a year to attend a nation wide competition. So at the competion he should be around 23 at most. After the competition, he undergoes a project to create a life-extension drug. It is implied he spent at most 2 years on it. He is now max 25 years old. It is stated that the drug should only work correctly on people older than 30, and will rejuvenate about 10 to 20 years based on current age and body condition. MC is elegible for the Medicine. WTF. He is even later described as a middle-aged man, despite being called a young up-and-coming smith earlier in the story, which if the timeline is to be believed has only progressed around 3-4 years at max. He should be around 25 years. What really broke the back was MC took time off after project completion to vacation. He goes to Shanghai University, where it is implied he is visiting his sister as a few paragraphs earlier states she is studying there. He arrives at the Uni and it turns out he is meeting a girlfriend who I cannot recall at all who is apparently his Girlfriend. WTAF. That just killed all motivation for me to continue if the Author seems to have a Schizophrenic episode and forgets all his key story points

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