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Pierced not placed
After casting his spells, Archer swooped down while readying his claws before swiping at the unsuspecting creatures. They placed right through the enemy's bodies, causing blood to splatter the ones behind them.
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Fantasy · NegansPalace
i think you need to just swap maeve and nefis names in the last bit
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Fantasy · NegansPalace
Where did Maeve suddenly come from and the phrasing is off on the end sounds like Maeve is inviting archer and nefi to join her
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Fantasy · NegansPalace
you jumped from 22 to 20 to 100
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flea not flee
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you said the rex was wave twenty-second
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Fantasy · NegansPalace
should that by be but?
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down on him not her
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Fantasy · NegansPalace
no worries, i only brought it up because he often over pays to restaurants he likes, especially if he orders a lot
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Fantasy · NegansPalace
i don't think you want to use in there. in you doesn't make sense.
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striking?
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Fantasy · NegansPalace
i think that should be walk? also " before Lead
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Fantasy · NegansPalace
He noticed
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so she got weaker? if she was stronger months ago
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forward not food
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Fantasy · NegansPalace
at 910k that demigod fight with mom was worth nearly 2 days of grinding
[Experience: 2853500>3760000]
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Fantasy · NegansPalace
no tip?
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Fantasy · NegansPalace
i thought so to but i scrolled up and its bear
Archer tried the Forest Broth, which exploded in his mouth, from the bear meat's sweet taste to the vegetables' earthy flavor. As the mana flowed into his body, he felt refreshed. He started eating it without speaking, as Eveline also copied.
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Fantasy · NegansPalace
floor not flow
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Fantasy · NegansPalace
np on the edits btw i forget which chapter i think the mana fights one but you switched tenses a lot
ch 781 Thundera
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