Dinessu

Dinessu

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Dinessu
Dinessu
2 years ago
Posted

I love the main character easy going life. It something I wish I had right now. Even if he complains alot about being stressed out, I think waking up to a rich family is the best thing that can happen to him. But I think if you could make your writing more elaborate and clear it will be easier to read

Dinessu
Dinessu
2 years ago
Commented

Although there are some parts that are hard to understand because of the way you wrote it, the story is interesting

Dinessu
Dinessu
2 years ago
Commented

In this chapter it was hard to tell if you switched from first person point of view to a third person point of view. I think you should work on that

Dinessu
Dinessu
2 years ago
Posted

I found myself drawn to the characters, I see a woman who is going to be strong and I am already lovin' it. Your writing style 🤯. It made me jealous. While I continue to read this book I hope it becomes a manhwa some day

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Dinessu
Dinessu
2 years ago
Posted

I love the story, I think I love Sam more. I would like to see the mate he would marry. What i don't like about the story is lillian ability not to fight back. Weak females are not my thing, I do hope to see her become a strong female lead. The story is well written, a bit rushed for my taste but still good

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Dinessu
Dinessu
2 years ago
Commented

Your writing style makes it seem more like a screen play than an actual novel. If that is what you are going for

Dinessu
Dinessu
2 years ago
Posted

I think you really brought out Hwang character well, I found my self loving her and hoping that they would pick her and when I saw she got an offer from that company I was glad about it, I can see that you have published many books for that I was jealous because my book is the first book I am publishing on webnovel. it made me want to get to where you are now. anyways the storyline is[img=recommend]

Dinessu
Dinessu
2 years ago
Posted

I was so glad when the author changed it from first person point of view to a three person point of view, it really brought out the characters more. I love that there is a sort of mystery and suspense to it, makes you wonder why he is calling her my Nadia. I see emily and Nadia friendship as unhealthy and I think Emily is just advising her friend in the right way cuz you won't want your friend to enter a suspicious job just for money

Dinessu
Dinessu
2 years ago
Commented

I will be honest, your work is good but there are some part that needs a bit of work. I am saying this because as a writer I would also like if someone tell me where I need to improve on, me I am a writer who has grammar issues, if you take a look at it you would know that I have some issues I need to work on and I am doing that

Dinessu
Dinessu
2 years ago
Posted

This is the kind of novel you wich could also be made into a manhua, I really hope this story gets to that point. I think you are a good writer and I hope to see more chapters