Good start and awesome idea, but you should be consistent in how you write dialogue. Either write it the traditional way (quotations) or the script style throughout. Consistency makes a story easy to follow and doesn’t disrupt the flow of it. Also, more details about the plot (including the *** between Lionel and Sophia) would help you provide more context and help us readers be immersed into the story. You have to show us, not tell us, what is going on. Maybe some imagery can help?
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Good start and awesome idea, but you should be consistent in how you write dialogue. Either write it the traditional way (quotations) or the script style throughout. Consistency makes a story easy to follow and doesn’t disrupt the flow of it. Also, more details about the plot (including the *** between Lionel and Sophia) would help you provide more context and help us readers be immersed into the story. You have to show us, not tell us, what is going on. Maybe some imagery can help?
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Zodiac: A Generation of Heroes
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