Man the chapters are so short and it’s hard to keep interest when it takes like 3 or 4 chapters to get the ball rolling on things. Once you get caught up to the latest chapter, it really does feel like the story is moving at a snails pace. I think it would be better if you combined 2 chapters into 1 and dropped every 5 days or so instead of your current 1 chapter every 2/3 days. Maybe even combine 3 chapters into 1 and drop once a week. Idk, something for you to think about.
ch 42 Eyes on the Prize
Book&Literature · Dream_Guardian
Cringe
"May all of your enemies have their nipples ripped off and shoved down each other's throat." Harry said. The goblin blinked at him before nodding appreciatively.
Book&Literature · Infinity_Weaver
Lame name, but we move on
A week later and Harry was pleasantly surprised to still have his snake friend with him, the two had also settled in a name for him. One day Harry had simply decided on 'Jet', Harry had heard a teacher say 'jet black' and got the idea from that, it was a simple name but Harry liked it and his snake like it so it didn't really matter.
Book&Literature · Infinity_Weaver
Neville’s lame asf, same with Ron
ch 20 Chapter 20
Book&Literature · SlyOW
Please no Neville friendship 🙏
ch 20 Chapter 20
Book&Literature · SlyOW
The whole light vs dark debate is getting dragged so much. Harry’s been moaning about how he doesn’t have any control over his life, could have died at the quidditch World Cup, all of the other past incidents, and when he finally gets a chance to change all of that he is still hung up on this. Now I have to ask, is the story actually going to delve into dark magic or is the title clickbait?
Salazar had told Harry that reading the introduction of the book might be able to persuade him that rituals weren't evil or dark. Harry was beginning to agree with the portrait. While the branch of magic was given a bad reputation, it seemed fairly interesting, and very useful, as shown by the first few paragraphs of the book's foreword.
Book&Literature · Dream_Guardian
"My friends are going to think I've gone evil or something." muttered Harry.
Book&Literature · Dream_Guardian
Idk feeling pretty bored. Typical Gary Stu Harry so far. I felt like it was going somewhere and the novel living up to its title when Harry changed his features to look like Tom Riddle, but after that the momentum died.
ch 13 The Power Within
Book&Literature · Dream_Guardian
Enough yapping, introduce Gellert and let Ethan learn some Dark Arts
ch 18 Chapter 18
Book&Literature · SlyOW
yeah I’m done fuck Draco
ch 30 The Secret of Enhanced Spellcasting
Book&Literature · Nebula_Scribe
lame
ch 29 Wand Selection
Book&Literature · Nebula_Scribe
ugh I hate when Draco gets forced along into things like the upcoming tutoring sessions
ch 17 Serpent's Whisper
Book&Literature · Nebula_Scribe
I swear in every “dark” Harry story he gets betrayed by friends when he was younger multiple times, starts to turn a little dark, and then once Hogwarts comes around, proceed to repeat this cycle of broken trust. Should’ve just obliviated him
ch 45 Muffliato
Book&Literature · Galaxy_Wonder
Is Harry going to be working for the light? It seems like the story is progressing in that direction unfortunately. I assumed he would be heading towards the dark side. Doesn’t mean he has to be a death eater under Voldemort or anything, but I would like to see a dark lord Harry.
ch 25 The Dark Knight and the Dark Lord
Book&Literature · Galaxy_Wonder
Perfect introduction, sucked me right in (pause).
ch 0 1 The Start of a Beautiful Friendship
Book&Literature · Galaxy_Wonder
Guns are so lame in fantasy media/literature. I hope it doesn’t go this route
And if not, it's not my fault, I need to level the playing field. I'll somehow mix up some gunpowder and start making guns, it's their own fault. Then we'll see who's who.
Anime & Comics · Paracetam0l
I like Cassia as a love interest, but the only way I see it working is if Grindelwald lives up to his grandfathers legacy, and Cassia’s love for Grindelwald is greater than her loyalty to the light. If this goody goody path continues, this story is doomed.
ch 34 Chapter 34
Harry Potter: Heir of Darkness
Book&Literature · SlyOW