Raptor2244 - Profile

Don't get me wrong tho, I look forward to the day where MC surpasses the amount of Chakra and raw strength as the juubi and because like the true god of the ninja world. He can call himself the jade emperor or some sh*t😂😂😂. Anyways, I wish you luck in your writing.

The seal that I just described would basically turn them into ride or die, perfext confidant, no secrets between them, soul mate type characters which I thi k would provide nice splash of genuine fluff and love in an otherwise smut/power trip novel. An equal that Mc could trust with his whole heart and all of his secrets and never have to worry about being betrayed or used.

Average jonin ***

Well, if you decide to include the otsutsuki clan in this fic like they are in boruto, he will probably need to find some way to increase that limit. Also if one thousand is the juubi, then your average join is a 20 at the absolute most. The ten tails is an agglomeration of natural energy formed from a tree that accumulated all the natural energy formed by all the life on the planet for thousands of years. I think 20 for a jonin might actually be too much if I'm thinking about it 750 is a ludicrous amount of Chakra, way way more than hashirana or madara has. As strong as they are they can't be mentioned in the same sentence as juubi in regards to raw force and Chakra amount. I know this is debated a lot but while many characters in Naruto have a lot of Chakra, they are powerful because they have techniques and special abilities that have been refined and honed that allow them to fight on the same level as beings who have way way more Chakra and brute force. If kaguya otsutsuki had the fight instincts, experience, and techniques as madara Uchiha for example, Sasuke and Naruto would have been dead before they can blink. I mean, hashirana statedduring the war that he had as much Chakra as kurama during the war But you have to take into account that at the time kurama had only half his Chakra (yang half) and that this conversation occurred towards the end of the fourth ninja war. At that point Naruto had been spamming thousands of shadow clones, all using KCM, fought against madara, obito and the other tailed beasts. So we can assume that kurama was basically running on fumes at that point. It was only a little bit before this conversation that kurama actually said that he had to take time to generate more Chakra because he was basically out after using kurama avatar. And the full size kurama is only a small portion of the full strength of the juubi. So we can assume that hashirana has much less Chakra than the juubi, to the point where he can't even compare. Misame was called the tailless biju, but this was just a hyperbole. In reality it's likely that most of the Chakra monsters of the world (Naruto, Sasuke, hashirana, madara) probably were comparable to the lower tailed beasts which had exponentially less Chakra than kurama. This is all based on little conversations here and there, as well as some logic tho so if you want to make hashirana nearly as strong as the ten tails in regards to Chakra amount, that's you're deal, I would just say that's a gross overestimating of the raw strength and Chakra potential of humans in Naruto. As for the seal, I would say that as long as kushina and the Mc are in an equal relationship where neither has true power over the other and it's more of a companion ritual or like a sworn blood brother(sister) kind of thing that's okay. People(including me) took issue to the last seal because the Mc basically had no freedom and had no power to resist. No matter how powerful he got if he was told to die, or murder his wife, or let his wife cuck him, or to murder his child or to kill himself he had to do it .he was a slave and he basically agreed to it happily. Even if there's no way kushina would do that, the power imbalance was to the point where despite loving your novel I couldn't continue reading it just for example. If the new seal is truly as you say, that being that it's basically a wedding ring where the vows are enforced with a seal, people won't have any issue. If it turns out that she can order him around, or betray him while he can't betray her or cause him pain like the cage bird seal, or the seal enforces on him while hers doesn't for herself or anything like that, it's likely that you will face a lot of complaining. Readers(especially on this app) just don't want to read about an MC who isn't in control of his fate and can't make decisions for himself. They don't want to see the wish fulfillment Mc they are currently projecting themselves into being forced to be loyal to someone who can betray him at any time and not have any recourse to do anything. Still if it is as you say, I look forward to it. I hope the seal design is cool as well. You could make it romantic like a yin and yang disk where MC has the yang half covering his whole back and kushina has the yin half covering her whole back. It would also be pretty cool if it subtly adjusted their personalities over time to make them like soul mates or something. This would be a good way to logically have kushina agree to share women with t MC. Like kushina would be the soul mate/main wife and they would share all their conquests between them. That will make the harem much more realistic without kushina turning into some downtrodden harem Sister "c" and being the Mc only true equal in the story(if only in position not power). Anyways, that's my two cents. Good luck.

I really like the premise for this novel. The idea of an extremely I telli gent man, going to a high tech world and gaining strength through biological and technological modification and creating an empire is awesome. The execution was terrible tho. It's obvious that the novel was written by an Ai. It feels utterly inhuman. It's so dry and factual that I feel like I would be more entertained reading a math textbook. The dialogue is so emotionless even when I can tell the author wants to portray an emotional moment. Next, is that the Mc is stupid. In his first life he was killed by the government because he made advanced technology and medical treatments and then published all that information. He learned nothing in this life and did the same thing in his second life. Exposing his intelligence and research. He obviously wasn't killed but was for some reason made into an officer in the army which is beyond impossible. An asset of his Intelligence would never see a battlefield. Moreover, he spends all his time making technological advances in military technology and just gives them away. In the prologue chapter, it says he became an expert in forerunner technology and learned how to use technology to modify his body and alter his genetics. We of course, never see the results of this. Basically it takes 30 chapters, and finally he undergoes the spartan procedure and becomes a base supersoldier. It's just utterly disappointing. When the author unrepentently said he was going to make an OP protagonist I was expecting things like atom sized nanobots, him transferring his consciousness neuron by neuron into some sort of indestructible nanotech body that was constructed by him using advanced technology and biological metallurgy to make some sort of super advanced technological homonculus that allows him to Interface with all the technology he built. I was expecting iron man. I was expecting pacific rim. I was expecting Gurren laggan. I was expecting Gundam. Instead he underwent the basic spartan procedure and made some spaceships and robots for the military. Mc is not op. Doesn't make his own empire. Doesn't make crazy tech to rule the universe like Warhammer 40k or any of the media I wrote above. It's a letdown because author promised op Mc and we got a smarter than average spartan with a high military rank. So basically we have Ai written textbook style retelling of a man who makes above average military tech. I'm sorry for the rant, but t It was such a disspointing read after what you said in your synopsis.

Well, the idea is really good and I was looking forward to it once I read his wishes. However the writing quality is really bad. I can tell whoever wrote this doesn't really speak English. Moreover, the novel is pretty ridiculous imo. The main character basically gets godlike cultivation talent, a godlike dragon physique and a godlike conceptual physique called pure yang body. He then reincarnates, cultivates for like two seconds to the first level of cultivation, then goes and recklessly attacks some kobolds and almost dies. In fact he would have died if he wasn't saved by another character. It's honestly just ridiculous. After I read that I just dropped it, it lost it's interest after the Mc proves himself to adhere to Japanese MC r*tard syndrome despite spitting on Japanese media and culture for a whole chapter. Who in their right mind would racklessly throw away their life after being granted infinite potential and a fast track to being a multiverse level deity. It's so stupid it kind of makes me wish he had just died from the kobolds because he obviously doesn't deserve any of the wishes he was given.

Ah see I read the synopsis and didn't see this. If it's a seal that establishes an equal and loyal relationship between two people that is perfectly fine Two people in service to one another for their whole lives is actually very romantic in my opinion. I guess I was misunderstanding. Now if she still ended up with Minato in the end tho I would count that ntr cause of the seal but I doubt that's your intention. The last one was full stop a slave seal and I just couldn't enjoy a novel where the Mc was a slave for life especially to one of his women. But this is more than acceptable. It almost seems like a marriage ceremony if they both have equal power in the relationship. If that's what it is then I look forward to seeing how it develops. Also will he eventually be able to break the limits on his physique and Chakra past 1000? I know that's not really the point to the novel but I'm still intetested

Ayo obviously I'm not happy about it, because who wants to read about a wish fulfillment novel where the Mc is a slave in perpetuity and is happy about it for some reason. I guarantee that you lost a ton of readers for it on both novels and probably most who stayed just decided to pretend it doesn't even exist because the other parts of your novel are decent enough to warrant that. You obviously don't care what your readers think and I will at least give you props for not changing what you want to do despite losing the attention of many for it. But I genuinely want to know why you decided to do it. I won't even argue or even respond if you don't want me to. I'm insanely curious why you'd want to write your Mc as a slave for life and everyone just pretends he's not their slave.