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He should fight for money lol, seems easy and has tons of potential, money + followers

It’s been great so far, there’s just one detail that bothers me. I feel there’s a plot hole concerning how the hell the Gracie family knew about Gorgo. They weren’t there and also didn’t have anyone watching when Adam and the rest fought those orcs, so how did they know?

Author just leaving a comment here because I read until this chapter to give the story a chance. I think it’s well written and has a good plot. I just truly hope that Adam will be independent at some point soon, i actually like the characters so far and enjoy him having a team of sorts. But it’s kind of lame to see him being dragged everywhere, it makes it seem as if he doesn’t really have free will, and that’s kind of depressing, no matter how cooperative Julius is. Thanks for the chapter

Why the hell did he not use the new weapon??

I was honestly super surprised by the poem. Great job author. Sincerely.

Yes, great few chapters author

So far I think the story has potential. Advice: 1. Grammar needs a bit of work to be honest, there are a bunch of mistakes that take always from the story. 2. I expected a bit more from the fight in the tutorial, it was a bit… anticlimactic. The way he killed the level 10 goblins was just too bland. That was his first fight in the book; it could have been a bit more grand in my opinion.

Hey author, great novel so far. I was wondering why you never mention him training spells or practicing his fighting style astral tyrant. Adam seems to excel at fighting but never trains now?

Gender bending? Did he become a woman or did I misunderstand?… what a shame, you should put this in the synopsis of the novel, a lot of people dislike gender bending. Good luck with the book author!

Si far im very engaged, i really like his talents and the power system seems solid, I’m very glad he doesn’t use a sword as a weapon too, almost every mc does. Just a piece of very subjective advice, but try to make the character unique, don’t make him like 90% mcs that have “all element affinity” and can do everything, i think reading about a character that uses fewer things in clever ways is much more intriguing. Keep it up author!

Pretty good so far, how come he hasn’t created any techniques based on his experience. Also another thing i think could be improved is the distinction in power levels, making it clearer how powerful each level is and their differences makes the story more immersive. Another thing I will say is that the fact he gets to have 7 helpers (the sins), but they all have to be women is pretty lame honestly, why take a nice concept and turn it into a harem? Lastly, about the legacy and his bloodline. He received a legacy from a warlock but the system seems more like something a demon would make (7 sins) and his bloodline seems to have been absolutely useless so far.