I love the story so far but maybe work a bit on fleshing out the characters. The world feels immense compared to character development, but the potential is there! Keep working at it.
Fantasy · Jeweled_Rose
The background on the world seems intriguing and well placed, the characters need a bit of fleshing out- but I like the direction so far very interesting so far.
I love the story, a little choppy but could lead to a really interesting plot line keep it up!
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I love the story so far but maybe work a bit on fleshing out the characters. The world feels immense compared to character development, but the potential is there! Keep working at it.
The Fated System
Fantasy · Jeweled_Rose