Reviews of The Saiyan in marvel by Kbreal1997 - Webnovel

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Not my cup of tea. It reads to me like (what I'd describe as) First Draft work. I find a lot of fanfiction are just posted with minimal editing and with the story not fully fleshed out. I rarely if ever find a story where it is clear the author has gone through some sort of writing methodology. Like write a first draft that is simply vomiting all your ideas and bunnies out onto paper (or wherever you write). A second draft that is the product of reviewing your first draft, figuring out the story you want to tell, figuring out how you want to develop your characters, figuring out your plot, figuring out the best way to do world building, doing some outlining if you need to, and finally writing it (all that being just during the second draft phase). Then after repeating the second phase as many times as needed, you get some beta readers/private readers to give you input on plot, world building, characterisation, and etc. Then do some revisions. Repeat some phases. Add new phases if you find it nessecary. Do more revisions. Cut things up. Don't be too attached to things that don't work. Do more revisions. Then, get some editors to do their jobs. Go back to your beta readers. Do more revisions. Go back to the editors again. Leave the story sitting for a few months, then come back to it and read it as if it is a new story to you. Fix the things that you find lacking at the point, and do some things over again if needed. That, is how a good story gets it's potential drawn out more and more. Instead of treating things twitter or posting things to get instant gratification. I tried that personally with my first story--let me tell you, there was no gratification. No ego boosts. And no nothing. Why? Because I didn't take writing seriously enough. And, as a reader, I know when author's don't take writing seriously enough. It shows from the first chapter.

have some potential. I like the history development. I think the hero is too overpowered but is fun. Need more chapters. I like the style of the history, the crossover is interesting.

Haven’t read it yet but the summary makes it seem interesting I will for sure give this a chance and read it but you’ve gotta keep it updated so we can see where the story goes.

Man .... just improve your English.Man .... just improve your English.Man .... just improve your English.Man .... just improve your English.Man .... just improve your English.

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Good story but god help the grammer is killing me. But I understand English might not be your first language. But there're grammer programs out their that are great just got to look em up. Or ask some of the translators out their on what programs they use. But yea LOTS of potential here.

This story is very similar to one from qidian on the Chinese site I used google translate to read it https://m.qidian.com/book/3573338

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interesting idea but the story goes to fast. development of Story and Character has way to many holes in it. there are much potential to fill both of them. hope its get better.

I thought there was some lack of text.I do not know how to speak English very well, sorry for mistakes on the coments.-------------------------------------------------

Please make more chapter i will change to 5/5 more chapter more chapter more chapter more chapter more chapter more chapter more chapter more chapter more chapter more chapter more chapter more chapter more chapter more chapter more chapter

The story is interesting but needs a editor because of the bad grammar. I will help with the grammar if you need it Kbreal1997.____________________________________________________________

i like the story but it is writen in a childish and rushed way (i find that DBZ is underused in novels good job on that) so keep on working, and pleas use word office to correct mistakes and grammar or look for a editor, also i think that you made him powerfull too fast, i understand that he takes after brolly but tone down on powerups, i would also like it if you give some touch of reality to the story as a whole and to the charachters personnality as well, there is more to say but i am kind of busy but work on these points i mentionned

Unreadable, bad grammar, bad English. . . .

I liked the Story's concept. Mc time progression is very fast. Needs more details.Author needs to improve grammer and page count. Can be a good read when lots of chapters come out.

Its pretty interesting concept for me But i dont know man the chapter is too short And the opening seems rushed, well im gonna give it a try i hope it will turn much better, well cant judge too fast since its only 2 chap out Keep up the good work man