Yo, author-san I found something that could be improved. When markus is about leave after making suffcient preparations it would be better to write that he " ...CHECKED if everything WAS in in his bag..." instead of "CHECKS if everything IS in his bag..." but overall your story is pretty reasonable, I like it😁
Hey how come others always find him first in these situations? Didn't he learn energy detection? He didn't use it when he was roasting meet which could attract beast then where the hell was he using it? Please try to keep up with what you're writing..and even if mc is dumb as **** you just gave him a super intelligent systems so please don't write something you don't plan on doing unless it is absolutely necessary
ty for the story. English is not my first language but I think its 'on foot' not 'by walk'. As you probably need to use the expression a lot - look it up.
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