Okay.. now here I am to give you my Review Yay!! No.. to start with.. can we please skip the unnecessary parts if you don't wanna can you give life to their expressions.. cause it's like I'm reading about emotionless people.. I wouldn't mind 1 but 2 of them.. Uh-Uh.. you may want to add a Companion or Pet.. just add life to the characters especially those to on the Island.. please don't rush the romance there.. I have no need for that right now thank you.. also what are the the other uses of the Void Dimension then?? Ok I'll go to my problems now.. I need details.. about skills and their descriptions.. and what the heck is happening to the academy?? You can add POV's of the academy or the one's in the Demon's Castle.. just a brief one like "what happened?, where are they?" or other things.. now what about the demons then?? are there diffent demons?? Clans, Tribes, Customs, Culture.. Are there beastmen?? Different Languages?? Is there Martial Intents?? How about Politics?? Now.. I wouldn't really mind if there were beasts in the Island but there are literally none so what will they do then?? From my point of view cultivate and train.. now since he can't use Qi to improve his physique can you now use that lightning converted energy of his.. strengthening the body with what he has is essential.. we need to be resourceful here.. you can look up Spirit Realm for the some reference about body strengthening stuff for Lightning Body or something and get something out of it.. as I said before can you please not rely on Es EVERYTIME.. the Questions that needs to be asked has to have some significance.. for example "Es how do I train if I don't have the talent for Qi or Void Dimension??" other than that he has to have some other skills for fighting I know it sounds cumbersome but you can just combine then together to make a more powerful technique easy right?? Since you have nothing to do on the Island can you atleast make him do some eventual hobbies like Cooking or Crafting, Carving, Smithing I dunno.. even shadow boxing.. why don't you make a technique that makes that user a shadow of himself for training.. same stats abilities skills you name it but it
can only be used for spars nothing else .. anything that makes progress is good.. and from what I see that Demon Guy has alot of screen time now.. reduce it.. If you're going to make this a Multiple MC novel it's fine.. but please make sure to make 1 chapter for this Demon(Long Jiao) and Marcus.. don't mix them together in 1 chapter.. now if this isn't Multiple MC and his just gonna be a Big Enemy later on or a Friend even 4-5 chapters after they Fight is enough.. some ocassional flashbacks are needed in this story after all.. Now I wanna focus on Marcus now.. since his father came from another land atleast make his father special so that there is something existing inside him that Es can't find as well.. we can't just make Es Omnipotent can we now.. ohh and please can you make it so that he can have missions from Es to give him some currency for somethings that he wants to buy.. Energy is good for the Currency for the Shop but you could add another one for the sake of it.. Now it's up to you if you want to make this novel Slow-Paced or Fast-Paced.. Look here I wouldn't mind if he can find a technique that Es doesn't have at all.. I really can't find much about the story for now.. you already destroyed the MC now you can build him anew.. Ohhh I Forgot.. please give a History Lesson.. I don't want a Vague Description about the World Marcus is living in.. I need concrete history.. Legendary People.. Legacies.. Inheritances.. Ruins.. from that you can go deeper into the Story.. I'm just giving Ideas now.. but we need some twists.. something that blows your mind.. something that you can't even think of.. out of the box is the term.. I can't really help you much about this.. I'm not an author.. I just said what I thought of should be added.. Thanks for Reading.. And thanks for the Chapter.
Hellfire_Dragon