The start of the story is very interesting the FL is someone who physically and emotionally hurt that and not sure as why the evil creatures are out to kill her and being mistreated by other people. I believe as the story progresses she will become strong. So I like the male lead and look forward to more about miss brother and other secret that we do not know.
*Remember, this review is based on the first 5 chapters*
Constructive Criticism:
I suggest to either not focus too much on the past, or to make sure to thoroughly show how doing so negatively affects the characters mental state. That is the only criticism I could think of.
Positive Feedback:
Good character build and nice plot idea. Definitely took the twin thing a somewhat stereotypical route while at the same time taking it a unique route.;,;.
Personal Feedback:
I am sorry, this is not really my kind of story, thus I stop here. I hope you continue writing cause I will admit this is a quality book, just not a plot that I'd really enjoy.;,;. Keep up the good work.;,;.
a great novel for its genre.
it is an extremely sweet novel that is pleasant to read if you aren't in the mood for something heavy.
i'm so thankful that i have found it here because i have already loved this novel.
First of all, let me start off by saying that this is my first time reading a novel with a female as a protagonist, so good job on baiting me, fellow author.
The story has a solid plot. The characters personalities also touch upon the realm of 3D, a difficult feat to achieve.
But the grammar and punctuation would need a bit of work. I hope that you study the correct use of past perfect tense. Some sentences were awkward to read. For example:
"All the guests were very satisfied with the party, they all have fun. " (Prologue)
You should substitute the 'have' with 'had':
"All the guests were very satisfied with the party, they all had fun. "
This example above uses the past perfect construction to refer to a past reaction (they had fun) that occurred before another past reaction (they felt satisfied).
Anyway, the story was quite enjoyable. Keep up the good work.
Cheers!
i love this story very much.i feel excited everytime i read it.can't wait to know what really happen with the twins in the past.please post more chap everyday.😘😘😘
Chapter 18__] So far the story is evening out and giving more detail into the circumstances of the leads and those around her. Great story for those new or used to romance types. Give support to author as she is very brave to do this and share it with us. Can't wait to see what she comes up and surprise us all...
I'm not a fan of cheesiness stories or something... but this is a good story I hope anyone supports all original created stories................................................................................................................................
The story is not really cliche I find it interesting and a bit different from the story that I have read in wattpad. It was my first time reading in this app and I can say that it was worth reading maybe because the plot is a bit different from the story tha I use to read.
Love the story, these are the types that I enjoy the most. I hope the story will be long and stay on the route it's traveling. Thanks to the author for putting this up!!
I only read a few chapter.. but It's so refreshig.. need more update pls.. realy want to know what happen in the twin past... that Habby trying to ignore..
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