THE STORY IS VERY BAD!
I spoke that the story is bad because it's really ruined! Fcking ruined! At first the story is good and the flow of the story is really great! Like fantastic! And I like the main character very much. Then after some few chapters, a new character emerged. I thought that the story will be great if a new character came in. BUT! When the character came in, the story just got fcking ruined! RUINED! And starting that, i began to hate and loathe the main character which is bad because he is the main character. Don't blame me, blame the one who is characterizing the MC. I don't want to hate the story, the main character, the Author but sht I don't know what the Author is thinking anymore. I know I must stick with the story until the end but damn it! My temper reached a point that I can't take it anymore. So i dropped it.
This nobel... I felt it has lot of potential.... In the beginning it was quite good... But after 50 chaps... Many things have no logic or common sense....
Grammer mistakes....
Your story Backgound is interesting but it was not really writen much after the intro and i fand this the best part of your story.
Writing quality is bad, you can read the story but to many gramar fault but the greteatst BS is your characters in the story. To many bad cliches. lack of consistency and logic, when i have read the story i was thinking are all persons in the game idiots or 5 year old children?
Story is great i read up to 50 chapters but there is fire in mine heart witch is driving me crazy. So what happened... there is a BI**H which ruined story for me and many others she ordered her most trusted servant(women) to tail MC she marks him with one of her skills(special class) with durability of 1 year and MC didn't notice a thing she then learn all secrets and tell it oll to BI**H she then sent's her to get him. After that she left to get him and came back with him. How she got him to came with her???...well that is easy she said his name(he wears black cloak which hides his status: name,face,level and skills) he said that she is wrong and she asks if he wants to die back to level 1 to which he admits that he is who she is loking for and so she leads him to BI**H. Because he is VIRGIN boy he eats from her hand and is MANIPULATED(she also threats him with his secrets) by his BIG SISTER(BI**H) he reveals his quest and she DEMANDS he take her with him(he act like a little pu**y the entire time) after that sll is back to normal good story so if you can read after all that withaut geting angry this is story for you. I wrote this so you can prepare for the event and continue reading because the chances are better that you can handle the events and keep reading if you know what is going to happen because apart from that event the story is very good. I hope you will like it.
While the author had an interesting concept, it is quickly lost in a pile of bad cliches. This could be forgiven if not for the poor writing and complete lack of consistency.
Full of plotholes. MC discovered a hidden quest that billions of others did not over a century. This quest was in plain site. I mean, look at all the speedrun of any games out there, people find out everything. Novel story drop terribly when the story moved into being a harem. It's basically him finding more girls to bang. Girls that fall for him are one dimensional. Follows the "he's nice to me, he seem confident and powerful" trope. When I said bang, I wasn't exaggerating.
It was good just like your other story but please hire a proofreader or editor to improve the quality of your work. Addfghjjkllllpoiutteewqxxcbnmmloouyrewasdfhjkllmmnbvcxc
Dat hidden gem. I'm a big fan of MMORPG/SYSTEM novel, so I really appreciate this story.
Continue like this, from now , all my Power stones will go to you !!! You deserve it.
Honest Review
The Good: Love the background of this! Nothing very new, but still different than a standard video game novel. I also like it that it doesn't have any reincarnation or some other cheat system like so many on here do.
The Bad: MC started out good, but he suddenly went dumb around chapter 44... The women swoon over the MC waaay to easily, the plot convenience is very strong in this, like how does he happen to find a legacy item when the hundreds of thousands before him missed it? The gaming system itself needs improvement, it feels like the author doesn't have much experience with gaming. This isn't a bad thing, but going 4 months without even getting one level is a little much. Lastly, premium chapters so soon is terrible... It's not hard to tell this is someone's first novel and charging SS for it is a bit shameless. We may love those kinds of characters in novels, but not in real life.
I'm loving this book can't say there are some downers in it or the spelling and sentencing is the best but it is easily readable and has a plot which is easy to follow and remember.
Unless you want to read a story full of loopholes with no basic concept and A author that doesn't give a s*** about details and just shove the story up your face which half of it doesn't make sense this is not the story for you I can go on and say all about the stupidity of the design of the game backgrounds the stupid ass quests that makes s*** for sense all the events that happened around the character the leveling system the quest rewards in the crazy s*** that happens around the protagonist when he is level one are you ****ing me this story has been nothing but a waste of my time and yours if you're interested in reading it this is my advice for you take it or leave it (you have been warned)
Id like to start off by saying that the concept behind the novel has alot of potential, four races create a vr mmorpg where participation is somewhat mandatory after a certain age and most conflicts are settled in game rather than real life.
However none of the important parts of the novel are explained such as why his parents dont help him out when hes just starting out or play with him at all and why his school is so loose with rules/regulations regarding the game when they dont teach anything else, how he manages to find a legacy item somewhere that hundreds if not thousands of people visit regularly for years, the small amount of classes even though the game has been running for hundreds of years, the company/ people behind the game i dont think was mentioned and they have not become a huge super power even though they built something so important, why three women who are 7-9 years older than him fall in love ludicrously fast, why he gains a huge amount of money but hides it for fear of the government coming after him instead of using it for his family, why a 16 year old kid doesnt act like one when hes had a relatively normal upbringing and doesnt have any actual issues and one the author claims to be shy and introverted doesnt behave that way half the time, why the MC has actually no friends not even close acquaintances even though he has lived for 16 years, why people treat NPCβs like dirt even though being courteous at least leads to more opportunities and quests even after hundreds of years of the game being around, how the MC seems stronger than average characters even though he hasnt put any points into stats (before he gets his wolf partner), why the βCLASSβ quest that he gets requires him to run all over the game world before getting ANY ability or even the class name, the authors fetish with black cloaks and the way he introduces them, why does the MC need to keep everything a secret when the major powers offered him benefits in exchange and the did so somewhat respectfully instead of chasing him down and killing him to level one, why he bought a mask if he doesnt take off the cloak around people except his harem and NPCβs.
I have a lot more things i could add but i already passed 2k characters so ill end it there, but please get an editor and translator, everytime i read a novel like this i cant help but feel it would be at least 2x as good in the native language of the author and a βroughβ translation to english brings the story down.
So no spoilers. This book so far as I have read which is to Chapter 20. I know it is not a lot the translation seems to be machined or the person who translate does not understand English needs to be edited bad. You can get the gist of what is going on. The overall story is not horrible but the MC plot armor is super thick everything just happens no build up or accident. I think it was suppose to be accidental but if so the author or translater all failed that. Otherwise I would at least give this a shot for the free chaps and if you like it keep going. For me till this thing is edited to make sense I am done.
Grimson