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Psechi
Absolutely worth reading! Fun mix of plot concepts... contemplative but not deep. Then action! The one thing that missing sometimes is scene background and description. Hard to follow or visualize the scene. But who cares when we get such fun characters! Sia will slowly win you over, though she's an airhead at times. And I can't wait to see Ika in action again. Give this one a try.
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DeJeL
*Remember: this review is based on the first five chapters.*
Constructive Criticism: I'd suggest that with your constant scene changes you make sure that when the focus character changes, that you state who the focus character is... I got a little confused with the only thing to go on being the time the events were taking place.;,;.
Positive Feedback: You seem like some sort of professional writer with the quality of the plot, character build, and background. Also, your grammar and structure are well done.;,;.
Personal Feedback: I did as promised and read this novel to review it. I'm sorry but the story holds no interest to me so I'm discontinuing it here... Keep up the effort and satisfy the fans you have the best you can.;,;.
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Bigwall1296
Starting reading as a review swap but I must say this is a very good story. The characters interaction and sudden and swift transition between main characters is very well done. I can't wait to keep reading I thoroughly enjoy this quirky story. One of my new faves!!
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Darkon
Interesting not overused content worth read
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LexieJane
The writing quality is smooth and engaging, it's a very good read! The author updates enough to keep things moving, and the story's development is perfectly paced and sensical. Character design...I want to see more and more of Sia, I hope there's a lot a lot of chapters to come. Sia is like an accidental but still somehow kickbutt hero. It's an interesting way to have a character, and the author pulls it off flawlessly. I'd give Character Design 10 stars if I could. World Background is good too, I gave it 4 out of 5 because I know there's still more development to be done. It's a really good read overall, if you're looking for a story like suede, this is the one.
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Nolan365
Its a captivating story. As the story progresses it has not become dull. Can't wait for nire chapters, 6 is not enough. Characters seem strong overall. Sia has a lot of potential. Environment has potential to be creepy. Giant insects, yea we have a problem.
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Sayl
I started reading this novel as an exchange in reviews. I'm certainly glad I took the time, the story is interesting even if the amount of chapters leaves me wanting more. The quality and english used is of superb calibre and I must applaud both the writer and his editor for that. The characters show a good build-up in character although there is a lack of depth, yet this is mostly due to the lack of current chapters. The world building is interesting and leaves one wondering what the future will hold for this fic. I will update this review sometime in the future when There are more chapters for me to feast my eyes on.
For now I would advise people to read the fiction, It is worth your time!
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ElleKay
The writing style here is really creative and unique, while the story has a nice tempo to it-- all in the present tense. So it feels like you're right in the moment with the characters. It's really refreshing. I think the story and character development needs some work, but it's really pulling together with the more chapters that come out. Good world building too! Also, the author seems to be putting out a lot of chapters in a short span of time, so looking forward to making this one of my usuals!
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JonesGreen
Looking forward to more. This seems like quite the beginning and I wonder where you are going with this.
Sia and master sid are the main characters? Is he a janitor too? Why are the dates so different? If she traveled and hasn’t met Sid yet why does the synopsis say she learned from him?
I hope the next couple chapters reveal the answers to those.
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KingoftheWorld
Quality-wise: The novel actually has a lot of punctuational and descriptional errors, therefore, I rated 3 stars. I suggest that the author uses Grammarly, It will improve the overall writing quality of the novel.
Story: The story is still confusing with only 3 chapters out. Therefore it's still too early to judge whether it's good or bad so I rated it 3 stars. Neither too high or too low.
Character Design: The characters are fleshed out at the start. We know some of Sia and Sid's (Main Characters I think?) traits so I gave 4 stars
World Building: As for this we somehow know that Sia (MC) traveled to the future from an accident.
Apparently, there are colonies and space travels in this story, so it is a definite outer space and sci-fi novel. However, again the novel only has few chapters out so it's really difficult to rate this right now so I just balanced it out to 3 stars.
I'll revise my review in the future depending on the progress of the novel.
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yuhyeenie
Hi there! Just here to give you some reviews :) Hope you don't take my review negatively if ever it creates an impact on you.
To be honest, I like how you go through with your narration, its like written by an experienced writer (are you?). There are some minor issues with your grammar like in your first chapter,
'A shrill insane voice screams from quite a distance away, but the horrifying effect of the voice does nothing to the hundred or so other poorly-dressed figures around him. '
the part ' A shrill insane voice screams...' you could just modify it a bit like, 'Insane-like shrills and screams..' to me it sounds really disturbing because you are putting too much adjectives just to describe, keeping it ****** and short is needed sometimes.
'but the horrifying effect of the voice does nothing to the hundred or so other poorly-dressed figures around him.' ill try to edit this part because I cannot explain on what to do on this part.
'but the voice that emitted a horrifying effect doesn't affect a hundred (or so) poorly-dressed figures surrounding him.'
This is the only thing I could give as an example..
I hope you wont take this as an offensive review :)
P.S I love the idea you put in your story...
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LittleSoftPaws
Surprisingly ****** but deep cover picture and title...
You have my stars....
Wont read till it has 30 chap since i has seen many originals dropped before that mark...
So keep up da good work!
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Qidian!!! Clean up your review system!!!!!
Why must I YOUR GRANDMOTHER write a 140 words just to review? What is this school essay??!
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