Chapter comments on the chapter Where is my compensation? of the book A Rattling Monster [Completed] (Editing in Progress)

So... I don't know if you do this in later chapters... But I'll say this now because it's bugging me. WHEN YOU HAVE DIALOGUE YOU USE "[DIALOGUE]" NOT -[DIALOGUE] So for example. "Hi!" Said Bob. "Hello to you as well!" Said Mary.

not Dasvidania, but correctly Dosvidania (as man from Russia say)

The grammers killed mwah, ima drop this novel

Im pretty much filling up the comments section XD hahaha

The goddess has less brains but a more evil and selfish personality

The goddess is not dumb stupid. If I have to say, she is slightly less intelligent than MC

I would specify what I wanted to be reborn as

Cool!

Too many words for an rpg evolution novel I don’t to think while reading this kinda thing

This chapter is sooooooo bad, i don't know how you have guts to call it edited. I'm afraid to see what unedited like like. Not that I'm will read till that moment.

I mean rat boi what could go wrong

It's true that she screwed him over at the end but a rat is still better than a leech or a worm

😊

Persuasion 100

Великий и могучий Русский Язык! Никак не ожидал его увидеть среди чтива буржуйских писак.

Why a rat?

Spasibo za glavu, oheni interesno htp bydet dalife.☺

Thx

Dosvidania :) thats russian I think lol idk. ///////////////140///////////////////////// ////////////////////////////////////////////

Grammar and syntax can be improved. By a lot. Don't think that just because you're not a native English speaker you get a pass for that horrible grammar and dialogue. I'm pointing it out purely because it's something you need to improve on. Secondly, how the hell would he know whether a system is broken or not? You can read a thousand stories and you would find a thousand systems, but other than the basic numerification of stats it's actually rare to find two systems that are exactly the same. Some might not have titles, some might not have skills.all of them tend to be broken in one way or another, because and let's admit it, we're all ****ty people who just want to read about special snowflakes circumventing the system. Problem is, how does your CHARACTER know what this one does to the point he can ask for it exactly as well as describe what he wants it to do? Yes, I know it's because the author already knows, but the execution and wish for system clearly also needs to be improved on because to me it just feels like lazy writing because you want to quickly get to the juicy flashy parts.