Chapter comments on the chapter Big rat? Small rat? of the book A Rattling Monster [Completed] (Editing in Progress)

So he gained 10 hp but since curse he got 5hp so 45 + 5 = 50. Or i really messed up so much that even i don't understand

Is this going to be the normal writing style? Its kind of annoying reading every little thought he has at any moment. Also having the narrator is kind of pointless, doesn't/hasn't really said anything yet that rat couldn't have seen/heard.

The last part reminded me of Minecraft

Lol here come the rat god. He is the rat god rat god and what he brings with him is destruction.

Hm.... Somehow I can't help asking myself how the heck a small 12 cm rat managed to find and hunt 8 rabbits in a day. It feels like there are rabbits everywhere, and they just wait when something will fall from trees on them without moving at all. :/

am the only one thinks it should be a dot and not a coma in the numbers?

Guy is dumb says i dont know how to input those commands just say whatever blah blah change to system open or something

God this is so badly written, i only read up to this point because the non-human mc trope but this is complete trash.

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Thanks

Dude you've done a great job by pointing out the real life problems such as unknown factors, slow improvement and etc. But I think your grammar sucks, well, forgivable. But still, be careful.

Just throwing my two cents in here, I really like the stream-of-consciousness first-person perspective and look forward to reading the rest. Make sure you're keeping track of your math though, it looks like he gained 1 hp here, not 10 as you thought in your comments.

Please use decimal points when appropriate, the commas are an eyesore

Okay. Commas in number is starting to get annoying :l

Humble beginning of the skaven.

Man this is hard to read. Love the idea but I have to let you go

Ghøst wasn't here

" One already stole me." stole->stole from*

Thanks for the chapter 😉

Make the rat fight like in rick and morty 😂