Chapter comments on the chapter Prey or Predator? of the book A Rattling Monster [Completed] (Editing in Progress)

The Rat Ghoul Matriarch!

the " it's a beautiful outside, birds are singing " ect

did he use a undertale reference

Nice undertale ref

That undertale reference right at the start

the lack of plural forms is a little garing (is that the proper spelling of the word? I know a word that sounds that way exists in english, but i dont remember how its written), but otherwise really nicely written :)

Ghøst wasn't here

EXP

Page 5. Trees should be tree. Not trying to be nick picky, just helpful.

Thx

Its getting better and better

This reminds me of the ps2 game bard.

The bigger I have ---> The biggest I have

"And adventurers not really a solution either." not->are not* Also, sentences should not start with "and" or "but" in English. "But in the end, wolves are always the problems"->"In the end, wolves are always a problem"

Thanks for the chapter 😉

ya

That was good

Why is the aura of undead is with mc? But if it’s from all the killings then shouldn’t everyone be affected by that too? Or is it because he ate the lich that the aura got stuck with him along with the curse? Hmm.

Thanks for the chapter!

Thanks