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I really enjoy story so far, I usually don’t like stories with modern world elements such as cars but this novel does it nicely especially when a lot of damage can be done to a vehicle. I don’t understand god powers yet but the story still makes sense without a complete explanation. I like the comedy and jokes that happen as well. Story is in my collection and I want to wish the author gud luck.
As a fellow author, I find myself marvelling at this great piece of literature!
Everything seems to be going for you, from the consistent updates to the interesting characters and perfect pace...
If you don't watch out I'm going to steal your style!
Regardless, I would wholeheartedly recommend this to anyone looking for a great fix. The chapters just can't seem to come fast enough!
I really liked the pacing and the development of Asuka, the way his powers were established and slowly developed by means that feel real and make sense is something that I really.
Also, nice references ^_^
I hope that I improved my writing and story telling throughout the story. I may go back to the first volume and rewrite that to flow a lot better, or any other volume in the near future. I'm still in highschool, so bare with my horrible writing. I do watch anime, so you will probably see how I am influenced by it with my writing. Leave your thoughts and suggestions below (reply to this) Thank you for reading the Story of Azuka. :D
I'll start things off by saying that the writing quality is pretty decent. There are not very many spelling errors, commas are in the right spot. The writing decently flows. The main issue I'm seeing with the story right now is how rushed it is. It's pretty cringy and the rushed storyline doesn't help that at all. Lots of things are left unexplained. It's almost as if the "power" itself was an afterthought which is strange because the entire novel seems to be centered around it. From chapter 1 to chapter 10, we get no explanation for what "god" powers are, why they exist, or where they come from. Even during the first "awakening" of these "god" powers, the main character and the surrounding side characters, they just happen to instantly "awaken" this "power" in them for no rhyme or reason, no explanation is given, they're immediately able to use it with enough mastery to defend themselves and with only one or two sentences of instruction from the person running the whole awakening process. Combine this with the fact that the author throws a cliffhanger in when there is zero requirement for one to be present. It doesn't further the plot, it doesn't explain issues, all it does it add a cringy shounen Esq type fight that is, as of this point in time, completely pointless. I feel like the author watched a bunch of anime that involve special powers, he saw that during the awakening process there is always some kind of conflict and then he decided to copy that generic conflict setting for no other reason but because he thought he should. It's lackluster and unoriginal. It shows very little effort on the authors part. It wouldn't be such a bad thing if the author had actually capitalized on the whole ordeal by expounding on some kind of information that the readers/audience weren't aware of. He could've used it to increase the absolute horrendous amount of world building that we currently have (absolutely none). The author didn't do that however, he threw in cliffhanger during some important parts of the actual plot, interrupted it with a fight scene that is shounen-esq, completely unoriginal, and exploited its use in no meaningful or important way, then he proceeded to skip the entire ending part of the cliffhanger, giving no explanation as to why the fight started, the purpose behind the fight, the events that lead up to the fight, nothing. It is my sincere hope that the author goes back and rewrites the entire first ten chapters of this novel. You have left too many problems in your story. Too many things that were left unexplained, too many plot devices left unexploited. Your story idea is nice, but your execution is terrible, I suggest looking for someone to proofread your story before you publish it.
Since this is your first story.. consider this as my best wishes to your story.
Wish you luck... Don't give up on your story and stick with it to the bitter end!
Life is like a novel...
Of you drop a novel mid-way... Its no different than committing suicide.. so make sure your novel's true potential is realized and is grown to the heights that it is meant to reach...