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4.35

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It has potential. But you have stopped working on it. (last chap was updated a year ago.) There were a few grammatical errors that I could find. And it would help if you spaced out between paragraphs—overall exciting work. I am not into hero stuff but still (if I ignored the spacing), I enjoyed it. But in the end, you stopped working on this.
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NatsumeRikka
Like I said, anime meets book. Bnha×weak but maybe op mc = good book. Grammar is a bit messy. Seems like a fanfic and feels like it too. I was singing bnha intro out loud. Love it ❤️, update soon.
5yr
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lazyredragon
Your book is pretty awesome if the first thing that came to mind was, where's the rest of it!!!!!! An awesome world with awesome people, MC is pretty cute like a more confident deku This book goes great with nachos!
5yr
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Mario134
This has a good start. I wondering how your gonna keep the story going. Also a Friday has passed and you haven't posted. If the book doesn't update on time I'm not going to read on. Please address this. Thank you :) I like the book idea overall. My favorite is Hunter x Hunter.
5yr
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Yerra468
That was Nutty, you need to get more nuts. The first chapter and second chapter were wrote good. You need to keep editing. I liked the fighting scene, it was nuts.
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5yr
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lolahrunda
I like that the author was able to create a beautiful world through the story, the drawback was that the conversation was slightly difficult to follow since it was too close together. Overall, I enjoyed the story.
5yr
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DazzlingGem
So, I'm going to give a review based on the criteria on this site. But, please remember that this is the first time I've given a review and this is only on chapter 1. _________________________ **Writing Quality: 2/5** There were grammar mistakes, but I guess it's still readable. You sometimes use the wrong words, like 'then' instead of 'than' and 'there' instead of 'their'. But those can be corrected even in Microsoft Word. Maybe you should type your chapters there first before uploading here. I've never tried Grammarly but other authors were suggesting it. Oh, and you have sentences that didn't start with a capital letter. Another point was punctuation. I don't remember most of the rules actually, but there were obvious ones, like phrases you should have ended with a period but used a comma and vise versa. There were some sentences where the next line was another sentence but you didn't put a period. Then, your use of quotation marks. You don't put another end quote and start a new one if those lines were said by the same person, unless you had the next quote in another paragraph but that's only an open quote. And I see you still haven't repaired the previous issue on the paragraphs. That was why I never continued on to chapter 2. :) **Stability of Updates: 2/5** Had to rate you less here, since most writers at least try to have a stable update. I'm not asking for daily, just stable, even once a week or at least a schedule. Besides, you could write more as practice! As a reader, I look at the release schedule next after looking at the chapter count, once I've decided that the story (from the synopsis/reviews) was good, of course. Anyway, in case you're going to start another novel, I suggest you stockpile first before uploading. **Story Development: 3/5** Not much to say here since I've only read one chapter, so I'll give it a neutral rating. However, the plot based on the synopsis and chapter 1 was similar to a few existing stories. I'm hoping you'd at least deviate a little from those. :) **Character Design: 2/5** Uh.. I don't know if it's just me but I feel like the characters were trying to act based on a script - especially felt that the brother-sister interaction was TRYING to be funny. Had to capitalized the trying. Also, using May for the MC's name felt weird for me. Not that you can't use it for a guy. And, I think he's weird, trying out the kilt, then complaining about it. Anyway, I don't like him. :) **World Background: 3/5** Same comment as Story Development. _________________________ Hey! Sorry for this late review. I said I'll also give feedback on the story, but I kept getting sidetracked. I was also going to edit your first chapter, but I haven't finished it yet. :) Let me know if you don't need this one and I'll delete it, since you already have a few reviews and mine has the lowest rating. :)
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Story and plot is there, well thought out. However, like the other comment, the presentation isn't really good to say the least. I can tell you are randomly splitting up the sentences because of your previous big chunks of text, however if you are gonna split it up, do so in a way where it is presentable and not at a random spot. Grammatical Errors are also there but can be fixed with a few proof-reads and edits. Overall, I can see where you are coming from and can be at a level where there is much more potential, it's just whether or not you can incorporate the potential into your novel. I hope as you continue writing, you will continue to improve and grow. Good luck in your future endeavors.
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MedusaDiva
I will delete this afterwards because i just did read the synopsis there are some spelling erors like in too you should write into instead as well as the first sentence was weird to read the story kinda reminds me of boku no hero with villain and heroe's . ... I can't say anything aboit the updates yet because there are just 5 chapters uploaded so i will have to write a new one or 2😂😂😂 later on
5yr
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gusdefrog
This story feels like discovering a striking picture done in chalk on a busy sidewalk. The ideas are obviously there, but the presentation is ... rough and even somewhat broken. Still, the ability to polish it into something smooth is no good without that striking base to work with. I hope the effort is continued. Luck.
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MarcheHare
Why does your novel seems like a fanfic or something and is your main character a guy or girl? Which is it and if it's a guy why is his name may? Make sure you provide answers on a later date. make it like a nickname or something. you have a lot of unnecessary spacing some grammar check is needed try to avoid a couple of slang not everyone can relate to that Anyway you have a good start so keep moving forward
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thewickedauthor
good work bro cant wait for the next chapters. i know your working on strictures and grammar so im rooting for you. and im also waiting fro the next chapter just letting you know. fighting!!!!!!!
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Splashwow
Never read a book like this before, interested to see how it goes. Feels weird reading a book that doesn't start with the character waking up in a new life new body new world. And its funny haha. 85/100
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Forsaken1
Hey, this was pretty enjoyable, but the sentences are broken up randomly. Spend a bit of time to clean this up. You stole the setting from an anime so, A+. It, is a bit hard to tell where, you are going with this. I recommend going back, and cleaning these early chapters, as they set the tone for the rest of the novel. It is a bit hard to tell when someone is speaking, or thinking.
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WinterBud
I don't usually review this early, but I just want to praise the young author's sense of humor and good grasp of characterization. It's my personal opinion, but that's usually how I judge if a story's going to be worth reading. In terms of writing polish, s/he (I'm gonna go with he) can still improve, especially with the use of punctuations, it's not quite there yet, BUT he has a great attitude towards learning. From what I've seen of him, he's open to growth, and I really think it's people like him who could become better quickly. Keep it up (and sorry if you're actually a "she" -- girls can become knights too!)
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MishalZamir
Okay now I've read it-it might be a little early to judge but this novel definitely has potential-just needs a little enhancement in writing and grammar Don't forget to break the paragraphs! Otherwise background design is fine-Keep writing! ^^ x
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Yankter
I don't know how to explain it but. It was sweet and short. Nice job! The grammar needs work but I enjoyed the jokes. I would say it really original though
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UnjustlyUnderpaid
The obvious problem is grammar, but I understand the pain of keeping track of all of the rules as a newbie myself. Other than that I actually enjoyed it, it has a nice comedic vibe while having some serious undertones. And the way I see it, when you feel some feelings (like dislike) for some characters then you are doing pretty well. Good novel and i look forward to future chapters! 🍻 cheers!
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MiaoMiao11
Funny! It surely has potential. Need more chapters. Hunter x Hunter for me! So looking at the writing style it seems good. Engaging. waiting for new chaps. Go for it!
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DragonKnight531
Shamelessly reviewing my own book. I regret nothing 🙅 ಠ_ಠ(⊙_☉)(҂⌣̀_⌣́)(⊙_☉)(⊙_☉)͡° ͜ʖ ͡° if you like My hero academy, Hunter X Hunter or even percy Jackson then you'll enjoy it.
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Myumara
A little advice from one newbie author to another, the text wall burns my eyes!!!! A lot of people read on their phones so try spacing the paragraphs out more.
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