This story is very interesting, enjoyable and at the same time very fitting in the world of danmachi. I hope he author keeps posting chapters because I really love this book!
not only is this story writing quality is only "okay" (which is not bid deal imo) the story is the exact same as the anime only a few things change , the mc is op and he does the same mistakes as the the original mc this is really stupid , if u like an op mc that is not stupid this is not for u
This... This really hurts that the novel has been dropped it was flawless to me. Read the whole thing straight, I beleive I did not even blink. To afraid I would miss a word. AUTHOR, if you see this, I want you to know that your novel is amazing and I am glad to have ever read it and I will be the first to read it when you post again.
This is literally just a copy of the original story, it's all canon apart from the tiniest of things, like a bit of extra romance, having enough balls to date the girls, no R-18 as far as I've read yet either, no badassery. It's literally the same as the canon. The author doesn't seem to know how to deviate from the plot even slightly.
He could've handled the Lily route in a different way and it would've been fine, however he decided to "let her steal the knife" for no reason. Why couldn't he just catch her in the act and then punished her a little? despite her circumstances she still betrayed his trust. Then he could've helped her all he wanted, however he's still putting on the ***** act and acting weaker than he is to go according to the canon.
I'm not gonna say everything is the exact same, however it's 90% canon at the very least. So if you want DanMachi Vanilla but in text then read this story.
Author, quite frankly. I think you might actually be proud of this so far however, from what I've read you've stuck straight to the canon like a baby to a breast. Have some balls and actually add some of your own story.
super but no releases in weeks without notice pls post some notice author if you are dropping or not pls...................................................................................
Ini tidak berbeda dengan versi asli karya danmachi.
Bukan hanya plot cerita yang sangat mirip, tapi bahkan percakapan untuk memulai sebuah plot juga mirip dengan versi aslinya.
Ada beberapa perubahan sedikit disana sini, tapi secara keseluruhan mirip dengan versi asli sekitar 80% keatas.
Salah satu yang membuat saya tertawa adalah dalam plot dimana bell kencan dengan eina untuk membeli armor. Untuk beberapa alasan, penulis lupa bahwa MC sangat kaya raya dibandingkan dengan MC versi aslinya, tapi eina mengatakan
"We're here to look at a few Hephaestus Familia stores, I know that the usual stores are extremely pricey and you still can't afford it yet but there are some stores which are used by new blacksmiths to promote their work and who sell cheap equipment"
Bukankah aneh memikirkan bahwa beberapa hari sebelumnya dia mendapat 8 juta dari penjualan telur emas? Jadi walaupun mungkin MC tidak punya cukup uang untuk membeli peralatan buatan Hephaestus sendiri, tapi dia akan punya cukup banyak uang untuk peralatan buatan anggota familia Hephaestus tingkat tinggi. Lagipula perlengkapan yang akan dibeli MC akan berkisar untuk adventure lv1 karena status MC masi lv1.
Ada banyak lagi moments yang terlihat dipaksakan karena kesalahan penulis dalam bab sebelumnya sehingga terlihat bertolak belakang .
Dan saya tidak akan berkomentar buruk jika MC dipaksakan untuk melakukan plot utama dalam versi asli untuk quest peningkatan sistem, tapi untuk hadiah quest sederhana itu sangat berlebihan menurutku. Ada baiknya skill atau item yang sangat kuat tersebut tidak didapat dari beberapa quest untuk melakukan tindakan sepele. Dan skill atau item lebih baik untuk dibeli melalui poin karena penulis sangat pasif tentang menggunakan poin.
Secara keseluruhan novel ini adalah versi lebih rendah dari DanMachi. Dan bell sendiri telah sangat OP dalam versi asli, tapi penulis telah menambahkan Cheat yang jauh lebih OP lagi tapi tetap menggunakan plot yang mirip dengan versi asli.
Tapi saya sangat suka bila penulis tidak menambahkan banyak adegan dewasa diantara haremnya nanti secara berlebihan. Karena saya sangat jijik dengan novel lain yang menggunakan DanMachi menambahkan banyak adegan dewasa yang sangat berlebihan, dan walaupun menggunakan plot untuk membantu dewi hamil cukup populer dalam novel lain, tapi itu akan menjadi buruk jika tidak ditulis dengan baik. Jika Novel ini akan menggunakan plot itu juga, maka buatlah bab dari beberapa versi sebelumnya sebelum dirilis cobalah baca beberapakali apakah itu layak untuk digunakan atau akan memperburuk Novel secara keseluruhan.
I'm dropping this novel and kicked it out of my library.
This novel is take cannon path which only MC soul and ability changing but everything else 95% stay the same like original Danmachi.
Hiding his stats?
Pretending to be weak?
Acting this and that so he can stay at the cannon path and afraid of change of story line?
I say the story lost it's creativity.
Sure many Fanfic is on cannon path but they have their own story.
This story? the only improvisation is different MC soul and System everything else is same.
Fuck that even Original Character name is wrong such as Arnya become Anya.
MC even want Slut Goddess Freya as his lover? Fuck, did he seriously wish to get NTRed? Unless Freya could change like EP:IC. But i bet it won't.
NOTHING CHANGE!!! THE ONLY THING CHANGE IS MC IS NOT BELL.. I BETTER READ ANIME INSTEAD BECAUSE OF THIS BULLSHIT.. CANT HE JUST FUCKING GET STRONGER NOW!!!!???? WHY CREATE FANFIC WHERE MC IS LIKE THE MC IN ORIGINAL..... WE READ FANFIC COZ WE ARE BORED ON THOSE ORIGINAL WHERE MC IS WEAK!!
HE STILL NEEDS TO GET SOMETHING BAD TO HAPPEN TO HIM THEN THATS WHEN HE WILL TRAIN TO GET STRONGER!.. AND FUCK? HAREM!
I dont kniw what to say but i like this so 5 star............ ππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ
Story well developed, the 'writing quality' is better than a lot of works on this website. i like this story very much and hope for this to not be fropped in the future.
The overall story is presented well with proper grammar, no real plots holes, while the beginning may be quite the same as the series itself the author seems to be beginning to make it his own now since hes set a proper foundation so its a good read. All i can really complain about his hope he updates it a bit more.
Pretty good story overall. Glad to see the author is changing the story near the beginning, but also happy to see he is still making the mc seem to grow than having the mc be utterly overpowered from the start. I hope to this story continue.
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Summary vs Reality. No more being a whimp vs never have conversations with beautiful woman without blushing. Beside this big lie you writing is below average , nobody normal would like to read this and enjoy your story telling because you don't have any writing skills . Despite that at beginning you say that this be no Cannon and later he be like " Oh in next 5 days I must be on this dungeon lv to meet him and him to keep story up" and you good know why because you don't have nothing interesting to add to story and probably in next few days create patreon and start ask people for money.
VitorEduardo