Mc is simple stupid.
Why doesnΒ΄t he tell Gokus is a Saiyen?
Why doesnΒ΄t he tell that he got reborn in a world with aliens and magic dragons?
He wish for Goku and frinds to become stronger .... Why not teach Goku?
This isn't even dragon ball for me and I don't understand what this pleasure is in leaving the protagonist weakened as far as I've seen you did your best to make the MC weak and for me that was it was just a waste of time
Honestly, at first I didnβt want to read since I really want to see sayian MC, but as I finally started reading I understood that this book is worth reading.
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Story developement and character creation is of course based on the ones that the author created. i loved the small arcs and the new ones made by the author, it was different specially the part where author doesnt adhere to the canon
Pretty decent story. Needs a lot of editing. If you don't really mind grammatical errors, this is a good one. I just think this should be re-written. I hope the author still continue to write.
starts out pretty okay but then everything just sort of falls into his lap. he becomes ultra powerful at 8 for no reason, then gets a free system on top of that. pretty lame in my opinion. doesn't seem to be any chance of cool epic battles or anything, he'll just be ok is my guess, but I'm dropping as of ch 22
Dumb mc.
Poor character development
Useless wishes
Op but always nerfed mc
Too much going around but mc is too dumb to care
Pointless story developments
Aimless story progress
Very bad character personality projection
What is so good about it that some people are calling it the best bdz fanfic? Like how? Are you blind? The cringe, bad writing,bad development, how does this a the best you ever seen? How? Have you never read anything before?
The OC characters who are his friends are just annoying, dumb and just awful lol the MC seems smart or strong but then he becomes passive and just doesnβt do anything it doesnβt make sense. If the author somehow got rid of these OC characters and got rid of all these people who now know of the dragon balls then Iβll change this rating but for now this is easily 1/5 since I canβt vote lower
The story started of great but then i felt that is just kinda slow. I got bored around the time they went out to get the dragon balls
Need to get rid of characters...
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Great story worth reading , tho I am not sure if it's on Hiatus but anyway it's fun to read story ,is there .so if you looking for DBZ story base it's good story to read.
The quality of grammar is much better than most of the fan fictions on this site, it seems to update quite often... the developments can be a bit too quick sometimes, but generally it has a good pace. Character design is SOMEWHAT lacking, it still scores a four. The world development wasn't too impressive until Chronoa came in, but after that it became much better. Thanks for a great read!
Boooooooo. Fucking slice of life? WHY THE HELL WOULD YOU ADD SLICE OF LIFE TO DRAGON BALL Z. SERIOUSLY WHY THE FUCK WOULD YOU DO THAT. WE WANTED EPIC BATTLES
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In just one word this book is "Awesome" I'm a huge fan of dragon ball and I found this book as very interesting so many thrilling chapters kinda hated the fact that the chapters are just few I'm really looking forward to more chapters and
One of the best self insert dbz fanfics I've read. The main character has nice growth which is explained properly. The events are a little different than the original series due to MC but still covered nicely.
Would recommend to all dbz fans.
The Mc is about as dumb as you can get. There are plenty of fan-fic's better than this one, no need to waste your time.................................
The reason why I gave you an overall of 4.8 is that you have not been updating the story as often as I would have liked . even the story is incredible , I can not help but think it could use a bit more updates , in my opinion , the story is amazing that you could describe many details for the readers to understand even if they are not as amazing as people with an IQ of 300 and 4.0 grade point average , I know that you are an amazing person to make an action packed storyline as amazing as this .
Did you drop it coz it's been awhile are you updating and completing other novels coz it's close to completion this novel was pretty good you know bro.π
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I really liked the story, but (spoiler) the moment he blows his chances with bulma after all the build-up just killed the story for me.
Although I liked the kai character, and how her character developed until chapter 50
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