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Kutu
This was my first system novel, it will always have a special place in my heart. <3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3
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Victor_Pkm
Todo lo que estΓ‘ historia tiene es muy bueno desde el desarollo de la historia, el tipo de sistema, la descripciΓ³n de los personajes asΓ como la buena adaptaciΓ³n simplemente se gana la 5 estrellas
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Suppa_Readah
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Piotr_Uklejewski
******************************** Good work! ******************************************
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PrinceOfChaos
I honest like the story it is just that I don't like one piece and I never have it's just not my type of novel and I know some people will hate that but I am thankful that you have taken your time to right that but I think it would have been better instead of going into one piece go to Fairy Tail.
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world0first
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foxytail
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STPRCOMMENDINGGIRL
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4bidienkingdom
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daoLingqugee
This is amazing I need more chapters ππ»ββοΈππ»ββοΈππ»ββοΈππππππππππππππππππππ»π»π»π»π»π»π»π»π»π»π»π»πΈπΈπΈπΈπΈπΈπΈπ€©π€©π€©π€©π€©π€©π€©π€©π€©π€©π€©π€©π€©π€©π€©π€©π€©π€©π€©
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kwertyu
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deadimp
Great story really love it. I hope the story hasn't been dropped as I really want to know what is going to happen next and can't wait please release more chapters soon
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1617blues
I'm trying to be honest with the stars, but at the same time giving it a higher rating than it should be. I also don't want to be rude, but... a suggestion I could give is to have shorter sentences. A lot of the words are all jumbled up together and it makes the novel confusing. Continue the great work!
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1617blues
I just hope that this novel won't be like others by stealing our spirit stones. All my favorite novels already take so much from me, and I have to end up paying for stones a lot. But, money isin't infinite, so I have to stop reading novels after a while. Then I move to new novels, and it makes my mind confused with all the past characters I've read about from different novels. Its really frustrating.
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Majeh7
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undercontrol
keep up the good work its quite interesting and a great novel to pass and enjoy the time and it would be sad to see it stop at this hopefully u keep at it and finish it
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zZCandyZz
Pls update soon. Cant wait to read next chapter.....................................
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Alien_Space_Bat
I think,this fanfic is best among others based on same novel.And the most interesting part is that the author successfully mixed the both MC's lifes without actually harming the real plot.Thumbs upπ!!
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StressByMortals
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Cmking
I like this fanfic ... i really like it .
first i would say from chapter 1 to chapter 18 the novel lacked some points..like there was no dialogs and that made it a bit boring...also i didn t like how the mc stole ninger from nie lie at first but he deserves it xD..
the story after the chapter 18 got a huge improvements .
i really liked how nie lie accepted to follow the mc..the new system improvements and the faction establishment.
i believe this novel can be even better than the original one since it got more contents...beating the saint emperor...the other enheritors or idk what (nie lie s oppenents)
discovering a new realm beyond the one nie lie knows about and fighting against stronger ones ( i hope they can match the mc power so the fights can be more exciting)
btw there a basic skill that you didn t mention from naruto world...it s the special teleport skill by minato... i really love it and i hope you can add it....also the sharingan please xD AND NO SUPERSAYAN ( i mean super sayan is a bit childish...yell a bit then your hair color changes then you get stronger pfft)
got work and i hope you dont drop the novel like many did................
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ManGanu
No 1 tdg
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Atalkingrock
The grammar sucks, I think half rhe reviews are bots, and he doesnt even put effort into devolping characters. Like for example, he basically steals from the book and helps ning'er out except then she basically devotes herself to him like wtf. And he also becomes an op grandmaster alchemists for no reason at all????
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GodKingTurtle
the story is not the best but it is hot **** i can understand if English is not your 1st language but you need some one to edit your **** its so hard to read it hurts to read this ****
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LanceG
Writing Quality 3/5
You need an editor.
Stability of Updates 5/5
I don't know know yet if your gonna update daily but if your gonna be active you deserve it.
Story Development 4/5
Although not as much as exciting, He doesn't pissed me off or anything, Though he needs to explain his action more rather than do it, since it will confuse why he did that to the readers especially the buying in the system shop, since it can get frustrating not knowing why he bought that or he just bought it for the sake of it why slightly pissed me off.
Character Design 5/5.
The Protagonist Knows how to gather allies not just strengthen himself, especially the "Befriending Nie Li move" where he got a cultivation technique without buying from the system and focuses more on techniques rather than power level which makes the story greater, where he doesn't just curbstop everyone without any form of technique + He needs to comprehend them before being actually use it.
World Background 3/5.
The fact that TDG is the world background instantly makes it 3/5.
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swordzero
Really love cover for this and will mc only be able to use tdg cultivation manuals or from other novels as well? ..........................................................
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