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Lukas_Winchester
I started reading this story a while ago, but stopped. I really didn't like how he acted and how his parents treated him, but I was curious to know if his parents regretted it later.? (Google translator)
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Madara_Uchika
i just give 5 stars to good stories cause they deserve it in my opinion so here ya go i think u deserve it and your a good writer and making novels aint as easy as it may seem or fanfic in this case
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Daoist7fduQH
Очень странный стиль повествования, просто тяжело читать. Бесконечные... троеточия... заставляют... чувствовать... себя... дауном... когда.. читаешь... Не понимаю: главный герой - даун или автор - даун? Поток мыслей у главного героя настолько размыт, что кажется, будто у него отсутствует часть мозга. Читаю произведение и просто не понимаю, что читаю - какой сейчас год, какие у всех уровни силы, насколько силен главный герой и т. д.(у меня такое в первый раз, а я читал сотни произведений).
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HadesChampion
As always your story is unnecessarily dark and chapter super long when a simple time skip would save us hours of training montage and monologue. Meh
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Notegemel
Love the fanfic
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Notegemel
Love persona series, nothing more ,nothing less.
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Moneybag
1. The parents of the MC treat him like **** and the reason is that he is not female. Absolutley nonsense since being female does not equal talented and if the parants are so emotionless they should have thought about the possibility that the MC could be more talented. The whole thing about the parents is stupit the. First thing the MC hears is that he is just an extra (in meaning not in words) than they start giving the MC hateful glares because he is huged by his sister. When the training starts they only talk about his sister completley ignoring their other child who is FOR THE FIRST FUKING TIME handling a gun. Trying to explain that with them being emotionless isn't valid if they can't even ignore their 1 year old crying daughter, for fuks sake she was 1 YEAR old for who did they want to kepp up their act? For their 1 year old son or for us reader? The wohle emotionless thing sounds more like a poor excuse for us readers why the parents are a**holes. 2. The MC is to stupit one reason is that in a world were giant monster go around killing people the weapons he choose is a knife and a pistol. The other thing is that after 10 being treated like shiat by his parents he does not hate them and just shrugs it of and now everyone who reads this please try to think of yourself as the MC and you should understand how wrong the reaction of the MC feels. Overall the idea of the story was good but the implementation was crappy
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DarkDawning
Things to consider In one of your chapters I read that the Mc can gain system points by killing humans(aura locked) bit in the later chapters I read that he can only get it from grimm The chapter I think was about the mc charging the managun to shoot down the airships holding people and grimm Pls check People that are only acquainted with rwby will only get a part of how it should look like example Where are the kingdoms situated What is grimmland What is badlands Some are self explanatory some need further elaboration I feel like the ending was rushed because the system points from what I have read from your fanfic Is powerful capable of giving him persona Able to regenerate aura to the peak giving pills the causes an outer guard to sleep Shouldn't the mc have thought by now that he Can extended his body's lifespan C'mon The system is capable of giving pills that force sleeps an outer god (nyathorlep) But for the last tume before passing the system on can't get pills that strengthen the body for a couple of years until his daughter's maturity All I'm saying is that it's sad to think that the mc is forced out of rwby universe because of a Strong soul Didn't get to spend time with his loved ones and possibly their offspring I saw conflict I saw solutions I saw deepening of bonds and creating new ones the biggest negative is a better execution of the ending The biggest positive is the realisticv reactions on a number of things not all of the situations but I think more than half give or take Such as favoritism Fear of criminals Betrayals
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Ancient_Immortal
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ANIfan08
The premise shows so much potential. As rather than a MC following/growing up with Ruby and Yang, we have an MC who grows up with Pyrrha. Sadly, the story goes downhill asap. I couldn't make it past chapter 14, even then I skimmed over the last few chapters I read. Grammar and writing is below average for the site. It can be overlooked if the story is even halfway decent. But sadly that's not the case. MC is a reincarnator, with memories, with access to a system. You expect him to be at least above average in strength/ability. But sadly he has an IQ of -10. Utterly stupid and unredeemable. Even worse, he is so underpowered it's not even funny. He relies on the system for the most mundane of things, like learning how to dodge (because God forbid he learn anything like a normal person), yet still struggles to keep up with other children his age. It might not be the most fleshed out system in a novel, but the way he uses it is a waste of potential. Plot was okay, and then it became a mess 10 chapters in. He is neglected by his parents, okay. But it's not an excuse to not know anything about the world. It's not an excuse to take over a year to progress in a ****** skill such as marksmanship (beginner to trainee). Suddenly separated from Pyrrha with no explanation other than 'Nikos Family rules' and you're not old enough. Meets a stalker and within a minute decides to 'form a team' with him, whatever that means. Goes on a 'training trip' with said stalker and no supervision. World building is non-existent. Mistral is portrayed as some sort of dungeon entity with multiple floors. Completely unnecessary. Parent characters were okay when they were around, but there's too much unnecessary mystery with no hopes of the MC ever solving it. But the worst thing is the insert of characters from other anime worlds. The story would have been so much better without random anime characters appearing out of thin air. It just doesn't need to be this kind of novel. Readable, but not worth it at all. Even among 'waste of time' fan-fics that plague webnovel, this takes the cake. Could have been amazing.
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louisjacq
Book 1 is a little too long and without enough substance.Book 2 is reaaaaly good however.😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀
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Ansiliden
Ya know i reallt liked this book... until the ending. I broke my phone from that ending. I mean did blake mean nothing? What the **** was salems death i mean punch soul snack leave. I was so mad.
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Vastoking
I even have a 5 star on this pls continue😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😣😣😣😣😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😢😢😢😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😫😫😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😢😢😢😢😢😢😢🙁☹☹☹☹☹☹☹☹☹😭😭😭
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Elder
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Elder

The beginning settled the hope for something interesting, but the further the more I was disappointed. If you have free time, choose something else to read.
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iHateNovels666
Can you put The Gamer series here please senpai 😍💕
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emiya
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emiya

The best............................................. I love this novel........................................... ............................................................. ..................... ........................................ .....................
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A_tired_immortal
i love this novel ......................................................................................................................................................................
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FlamescionTuna
Was looking through some of the new novels and found this. At first I was not into it but as I keep reading this it got me completely hooked. I must say that this is brilliant and can’t wait for the next series. Overall a very good job well done
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dragonmage124
had to drop it by chapter 5 for a few reasons 1) parents of mc do nothing to teach mc (stopping him from zoning out like a corpse, or anything really they seem to think of him as an extra thus making me dislike the story even more then the other reasons since in a world where danger is everywhere teaching your kids the basics to live should be natural yet author pushes mc aside saying since he did poor in the first time he held a gun 2 adults [were one is just watching and not doing anything] were better at teaching one kid that showed some talent at swinging a sword) even when he is 5-6 yrs old 2)mc does nothing to learn on his own (really learning since if he did not space out so much and actually listened to his mom when she told him how to use the gun he might have hit that target without going out of his way to miss just "too see if she cared" when over his 5+ years she showed no care for him to the point he can even think she would not blink to remove him from his own twin if the twin did not complain) he just jumps at learning from the system with no questioning or hesitation he STEALS dust crystals from his own home (while knowing that they are costly items with lots of uses) or why he even is ok with it in the first place while even thinking of STEALING from others just to get system points to do things he has not been taught 3) without asking his parents about anything about aura too see if it has any training methods he picks self training and buying magic (to drain aura for said self made aura training) all the while knowing others may/can sense the drop in aura when using magic (and not thinking of possible risk like if magic is only usable by women or even asking/learning about different aura usages) 4)mc has a weak personality in 5 chapters we get more zoned out monologues and system info dumps while mc getting dragged around by someone since he lacks both awareness to the world around him and is constantly focusing on his monologues and system 5)lack of world building i can understand before he started speaking not learning anything but after (even if not for him since his parents show the little care they had for him while caring for his sister) having them learn to read/write/speak and get a general understanding of the world could have easily been done to start world building after all as a somewhat well off family that has lot of tools [unknown how costly writing tools are since no general teachings where given but since they had a lot of weapons , dust , writing scrolls i think they have to be well off since i never watched nor read rwby] teaching basics should have been normal..we do not even know how big of a house his is living in since all we get is he went to the yard the kitchen or the twins bedroom to tell us where he is at 6)in chapter 4 or 5 he just uses magic and tells a girl about his system with no awareness of the people that may be near or listening while knowing that others can be sensitive to aura usage [or even have better hearing since he never learns anything about anyone or anything]which was the last straw that told me this possible good story was ruined for my taste (since i only got a headache reading all the monologues, info dumps, foolishness of someone who is thinking of training to be strong enough to survive yet is constantly zoning out to the point anyone can move right next to him while his eyes are open and not notice even while constantly telling himself in those monologues that he needs to stay aware but instead of trying to stop zoning out he thinks only to buy some skills, all the while not gaining anything in the way of knowledge of the world around him only using what little he seems to remember from the story/show about the world to be his base of understanding ) the way the system was made was well thought out and might even have been great if things were different with the mc or even how due to him constantly knowing that much of it is locked he gets focused only on the system so early
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8Hikki8
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8Hikki8

The writing is good, concept is good, anything else is good but the MC design. Weak willed MC, getting pushed around, sharing secret of his life, can't learn to increase his awareness even if his life depends on it, just dislike it. I understand the adorableness of the twin sister, especially the supposedly younger twin, but your fiancée to be, yeah not my kind of jam. Thank you though for the early chapter.
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Plutonium
You! Yes you! I am your fan! Yes from FanFiction I have read you other novel and have to say they are just as good as this if not surpass this novel. Just here to support. Though you have a different name. Whatever I like this Novel I support it.
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Sj_featureless
The story is great I just hope you make the MC a bit stronger faster cause the story is slowly getting boring for me but I don't know with other people.
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Sj_featureless
The story is great I just hope you make the MC a bit stronger faster cause the story is slowly getting boring for me but I don't know with other people.
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UnderworldZ
Read your work on fanfiction.net enjoyed it can't wait for more interesting fan-fics.......,.,...................................................,......,.....
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Shiinoobi
10/10. SENPAI NOTICED ME!!! FANGIRL SCREAM!!! Yes, this fanfiction is finally here. I stalked you on fanfiction.net. I can finally read this here instead of that other website.
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