I like the fact that there are multiple worlds... well 2 so far but there will be more as stated in the story, without the story really repeating itself in each world.
Writing quality is good and there doesn't seem to be many errors. The doa got me confused at the start though .3.
The stability of updates... considering this is an original novel the pace that the author is writing at is insane. I mean 3-4 chapters a day and the chapters themselves are long as well, not like some which release multiple chapters, but each of the chapters have only a few paragraphs.
The story development is good and we get a good idea of the mc's personality through his actions. The worlds themselves are described pretty well, without chunks of text. The first arc was a lil short though, that's the only issue D:.
Character design is good and as I said before we get a good understanding of the mc's personality and character. I especially love the women and those beautiful... scenes.
World background is well displayed, except where the mc originated from but who knows maybe there's a huge secret in the human world =3. The only thing I'm confused about is why the martial world is worried about going to war with the human world,
I have read enough to think I warrant putting a review.
First of the the update stability is top notch, most likely from having a large backpile of chapters or really fast writing speeds.
The quality of the writing while there are a few spelling errors I've seen the amount of grammatical errors are small enough that no one would notice.
The story development never feels rushed or out of place, you shouldn't go right to the next chapter, sit a little on the chapter think back to what you read and you'll pick up on things you might have missed that where hinted, everything feels to have some layer of planning
The character design is good, some hiccups here and there but nothing detrimental, yes some might complain that there's little background about the mc other than little hints here and there but I feel that even learning about his background could be a whole arc in itself and leaves a layer of mystery which works
The wold building in the novel while confusing at times if you're not used to the style of novel it's detailed enough to make you think hard about it in a good way.
All up it's a novel I'd highly recommend to people, The chapters flow nicely with each other and you can get caught up in it to the point where you don't put it down till you've finished reading only to want to re read it to make sure there aren't things you missed.
Hey guys, I thought I'd finally write a review of myself. I gave Focus a 5/5 in everything but writing quality. It isn't that I make any major errors, but it seems like I can never re-read through a chapter I've uploaded without wanting to pull my hair out because I made a typo here, or spelt something wrong there. But! if you can forgive an author for constantly spelling dao, doa, I'm sure Focus will be something you enjoy for a long time to come!
Aside from my mistakes, Focus has a lot of strengths. I believe the world and lore are all very interesting. There are countless clans and sects, and each has a unique history with each other that pushes the story forward. In terms of character development, Dyon is as straight forward as you can get, but it's clear he himself has some demons he's burying deep within himself. I also try to give every important character a unique backstory of note that explains their motivations and personality.
For stability of uploads, that's something you never have to worry about :) I've been uploading at least 2 chapters a day for the better part of a month now, and the only times I uploaded a single chapter was back when I didn't split my 4000 word chapters in multiple parts. You'll have something to come back to enjoy everyday :)
As for the story itself, the second volume will speak for itself. The first was an introductory arc, where we introduce the mc, who he is, his back story, and his first female companion. The second, however, truly delves into the lore of the Focus verse. We have mystery, backstabbing, and plenty of face slapping.
I hope you'll all enjoy Focus as much as I enjoy writing it everyday! :)
I have five stars on everything but story development the characters are great plus The actually mistakes in the writing of the story are few. However they gets one star for story development because they author clearly does not go back and check there story not for error but to make sure they aren't missing key thing that the main character clearly states they have. Also, .the author can not keep there characters accurate. I do not recommend this story for reading even if it was only read in the bathroom. Just for reference I have 7 times this has happened in the story and that is with just speed reading if you look deeper than you are sure to find more. All in all didn't waste your stone hear for a subpar story when there are actually good one out there.
Okay let me just say this the author of this novel is actually dumb asf he doesnt think anything through and he doesnt even Cultivate in the beginning LAME ASF!! Honestly i hope the mc Dies and we get a new
This is definitely a 5 star✊
I really enjoy reading this story, the story line is amazing, the character are soo real.
Really enjoyed the story hope to see more wonderful write up from this amazing writer
don't usually write reviews, and I have been reading on web novel for last three years.
I was surprised why this novel is not popular me did not go premium. after reading in about 80 chapters I found out why.
story is hard to follow, half of the time I had to re read to check what is going on.
once instant he is reading a book next instant he is screwing with some young master. there is no transition between the events.
it's very confusing, events are are hard to follow, world building messy, cultivation is not explained at all.
a lot of foreshadowing about the mysteries and lacking all the basic explanation.
through out the 80 chapters I read, I was never able to get a clear picture of what is going.
and on top of it, MC gets a boner around every girl he meets, note that he walking around getting boner around 14 or 15 year girls.
author describes *** scene 14 year olds for every few chapters.
and MCs excuse and flirt and get boner around every every girl is because his mom told him to be straight forward
very confusing story, unnecessary and underaged sexual content, horny MC who wants to **** every girls he sees.
This Novel is AMAZING!!
I like so many aspects of the novel so that I'll just say things that I don't like.
1. I'm not very fond of multiple wifes even if all of the wifes have a great backstory and character development.
2. I wish there would be a chapter at the beginning which tells the whole world building.. Like how mortal world and martial world are connected.. how the mc came from mortal world to martial world and much more.
3. At the beginning the cultivation and training is cut too short. For myself training arcs are the best and It would be fine if there was like even 5 chapter training arc where it tells how the mc trained and the thought process the mc had while trained.. not just skipping half a month in couple sentences.
best book I have personally read on web novel. great plot and overall character development while not making mc to OP. another great thing is the fact that all the chapters are free. thank you so much for writing this book and making it free.
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There is something seriously wrong going on if a novel like this is not in the top ten. Its already over a thousand chapters long with no sign of ending soon its got action, adventure, comedy, romance, mystery, martial arts, an MC who isn't afraid to put people in place, and everything else you want in a cultivation novel. Apart from the somewhat irregular updates, this novel is perfectly awesome.
it's a really good novel, don't mind the bad reviews. it's actually surprising that I just found this novel recently. the only annoying thing is I'm at chapter 203 and I still don't know when he plans to start cultivating
So much filler and useless information that at times the story goes absolutely nowhere for 10s of chapter at a time. The entire 2nd trial is a chore to read through as it's mostly dypn waffling to himself about incredibly complex things that are hard to follow.
Way to slow for me.
Probably great for some.
Fatigue. mind numbing fatigue.
Take the rape, murder, and then necrophilic rape of a main character in the first few chapters as a perfect example of where this will lead.
Its got such potential, but in only masochists could finish this. Dont get 600+ chapters in just to realize how much time you wasted.
This is am amazing book that keeps me coming back gor more every time. I have read thru this book 3 different times and will keep coming back for more until its over. the only thing i wish the author would do differently is postmore often or make longer chapters.
Somehow i got to over 200 chapters of this book. With that beIng said im aware im not the smartest guy ever but honestly i didnt even know what was going on half the time. Also mc is likely the biggest simp known to mankind.
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the only thing here happening is pure ****storm. Author retarded = novel retarded.
The only reason im reading is to hope for a better plot, but after chap 500 the author is still explaining 100 things in each chapter, you never get to enjoy the plot or anything. Only explantations and a weak ass mc, who, even tho has potential, is weak af, even after chapter 500.
Dude, I absolutely love you book (so much so I would've swore but, you know guidelines and reports and things) BUT I COMPLETELY ADORE YOUR BOOK, I'm not going to list anything as people should read this and find out for themselves.
Waste of time don't read. A wish fulfilment where mc is skirt chaser...... His actions made no sense to me and writing has weird flow. It introduces words like weird ass compass or what not which makes little sense.