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Love the story so please don't rewrite it. Excellent plot and great character development. I always look forward to reading it. Please continue when you can!
Thanks for the story! And again please continue it.
I really cannot reccomend that. The development of the story don't have even a shread of common sense, the "business" aspects are at the level of the understanding of primary school kid and everyone is so stupid to just handle hundreds of milions to a kid that have "magic blueprints" that he took from the hat... and someone that survived an apocalypse for years have mentality of kindergarden kid...
Good for kids with 8th grade syndrome. Avoid.
The plot go to past before apocalypse and redo it all. I often like this sort of things. Alo like anyone I dont like stuff to be draged out. But issue here is that all chapters seem to be fast foward summaries.
Like mc was betrayed in the past now needs minions/subordinates who do all his work. So he meets them once talks 2 centensies then wham minion is imprest and he already trust him and her. Same speed is all other stuff. I dont cimplain about the plot but stuf dont work like that in real life and is not belevable in the story either.
I love stories that go back to the past to stop the imminent doom, and more if that involves zombies.
But I read 4 chapters and it really hurts my eyes the way you write.
Sometimes when he thinks something you use "xxx" but some other times you use the proper 'xxx'...And you mix those up in a middle of the sentence so is really confusing, instead of using expressions like ... He frustrated responded to her mother... Yes, mother, we have a deal...You use this weird type of writing..."Yes, 'we have', mother,"
Also, a lot of sentences you don't use capitals letters to start the conversation...Just wtf.
Fix your grammar, be consistent with the way you write and maybe the story is worth reading. Because right now, I can't read it properly, it takes an extra mile to me to read such a story, and I really don't want to do that.
I just can't read anymore, I reached chapter 12 and my eyes couldn't take it anymore.
Sorry, please reply to this comment when you are done editing all your chapters because the story seems interesting but right now is illegible.
The overall story is good.But the mc seems like an idiot. He know there will be appocalypsenin 1 year,but he didnt really focus on cultivating but rather go to sleep. And when he go to other place armless even though he know that place is dangerious. So stupid even though he know their danger,i mean, he already live pass it, so he need to get more vigilant the longer he lived
What do us readers imagine about apart from being the mc of the novel we read? It is about wishing that the author is a robot or a god who does not sleep or eat and just writes for us 24/7. Especially fo good novels like this, always waiting for mass release and daily releases. Im right aren't I hahaha
umu... so the first thing the MC does after getting his 2nd chance is to go to the merchants alliance and sell sh1t? okay...
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THIS IS IT!!!!!!! I HAVE BEEN LOOKING FOR SOMETHING LIKE THIS. There are novels that are like this, but it was dropped. It was mostly original novels. Thank you for this novel and do not drop it, it has potential.
5stars for you creator......he..more chapter dude!!!!!!!.....and i wll give you alwys 5stars hehegehe.....btw you dibe wllll and keep it up morèee hehehe
A great start to this apocalypse novel. Need more chapters. Quality is great negligible grammar mistakes also world building was done beautiful would recommend to all my friends keep up the great work and please try to make regular updates on the chapters.
Great novel , nice story but bad updates , the readers need more chap bro , keep it up , if this novel reached 50 chap wil be many more reader come to read your novel bro , dont forget if add chap bonus each like 50/100/150stone dll
This was pretty good, I'm curious to see how it goes since I'm pretty weak to these types of books.
So far a pleasant array of characters its fantasy so I can understand the unreal Entrepreneur that is Zion Blake is real I like him.
The grammar could use just a bit of work and then we'll be good.
The cover is nice got that whole world end vibes that I'm fond of
8/10 fully recommend.
A very good novel with an interesting plot. To start off, the chapters have some beautiful descriptions along with intriguing characters and plot. The character (Mc mostly) is very well thought out and the story has a good flow and pace.
The few problems that the novel has is mostly due to English not being the author’s language (I think I read that somewhere) like how some words that need to be in the past tense are in the present. And some sentences have commas, punctuation marks, and words placed in the wrong places. There were some small grammatical errors, that didn’t really disrupt the story in any way, as well.
The novel is still a bit new so there isn’t much in world background yet, but I believe it is definitely adding on every chapter.
The update seems to be quite stable with a chapter a day and the story development is very interring so far.
I look forward to the future chapters and I wish the author the best of luck!❤️❣️❤️
Really nice writing, the imagery and description of scenaries, settings, etc. was amazing! It was so detailed, I could perfectly picture an idea in mind.
There was a few capitalization and lowerization mistakes on a few words and a few words missing quotation marks (especially shouting), but other than that, I thoroughly enjoyed the book!
The book is very interesting and promising~
This kind of genre is interesting and new. Although there are some errors, well, it's part of writing, you still able to deliver the story well. Great job😊
Strong start-punctuation needs enhancement,
writing quality is so-so where'as the background design needs a tad
improvement- The character design is fine otherwise! keep writing- adding to my library :') x good luck -meshal
The story had a good beginning, the plot of the story is clear, the direction transparent, world building not much till now as of chapter 3. But there needs much work to be done wrt tenses. A but of touch-up on grammar and punctuation. You can increase the description about:
1) The MC's emotions ( this is very important to capture the reader's attention )
2) necessary background ( only that that affect the story line, insert them inside dialogues or the like. Don't put them as fillers, your readers wouldn't like to much facts)
3) your readers want more emphasis on emotions, action, drama and plot. The less facts the better since they wouldn't be able to remember them much.
4) the views and opinions of the side characters occasionally
5) perspective of the mc through a third person view
6) circumstances of the villains, boss and the mini bosses. ( How they became like that, their circumstances and why they Target the mc)
7) don't use the common tropes as much as possible ( they have been spammed to death already)
8) don't make the mc a hypocrite
Well, that's all I have to say. Tell me once you've written more than 20 chapters, I'll leave a proper plot review then 🧐. All the best for your future endeavors 👍👍👍
I’m giving a good rating because I love apocalypse and kingdoms building!!! And plz release a lot because I hate to wait for a long time and will their be romance that will be cool!!!👍👍👍
Hey, I'm new to webnovel.com and I find it fun to read through these books. I probably shouldn't be giving reviews but you asked so nicely so here. And I really like where your story is going, every thing besides the writing I'm giving a five. I took AP English for two years and maintained a steady B-. So I'm going to say that you need some help with your grammar. Your forgetting your quotation marks, and some of your sentences don't flow. It simply the words your using. I'll leave some examples in my comment. But other then that, I think it's really good.
Hi author here, Let me give this work a five-star rating for the struggles author have made. I personally believe you will love this novel and enjoy it.
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