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Hello! I saw your book from the review swap and let me just take a second to say———— WOW!!! Your writing is so good and you should keep writing as I see that you have potential!!

Good story, although I have to admit, I was very bored at the beginning and almost lost interest. Later on it became more interesting. Although there is still room for improvement. Overly the concept is really good.

Only read about 5 chapters, interesting concept but executed poorly. First person novels are trash and the characters thought process is interesting but hard to follow.

Looks like zetsu but very good character development a refreshing read and is quite interesting still wondering when the white zetsu army will attack

Hello, your novel has been reviewed by Virtual Bookshelf. A review excerpt is as follows: Technical: Okay overall. A common mistake was the lack of commas before conjunctions of independent clauses. Characters: Gin – Great start to his character building in the prologue. It delved into his mind very nicely, and the following chapters consistently showed his personality. Chapter 7 is another good example of his thoughts, albeit, somewhat drawn out. The new students – Way too many. If all of them are necessary to the story, then more deeply introduce one of them when they all first appear, have him/her interact with Gin. Later on, introduce the remaining one by one, or at most, two at a time. Chapter 5 introduced Ringo and Shiro in more depth after their initial appearance, but the continuous amount of dialogue made reading sluggish. Either cut back and only include important conversation or which best expresses personality, or add action verbs to the speech—since continuous lines of ****** dialogue/quotes should be done in moderation—as well as gestures and settings to make the conversation more realistic and less tedious. This holds for other chapters with strings of continuous dialogue, too. Otakus. This is used too much and shouldn’t be the defining point of a character. Go beyond this. Nani. Again, used too much. A few times is funny. Plot: Sound waves, interesting. After the teacher explained this disaster, the proceeding chapters lacked intensity or any apparent development. POV switches such as in Chapter 6… Especially in first person, if you’re switching POV, clarify who it is before you continue the story. For example, Gin’s POV or Rin’s POV. Additionally, try to limit switches to at most every few chapters. Frequent switches in a single chapter or a couple of chapters is too confusing (especially if the POV is not clarified beforehand) and hurts the reading flow. The only time when POV’s might not be rightly clarified are in mystery stories, but even then, it must be done with caution. Chapter 8, the story picks up again with new insights on time, world, and MC’s bone regeneration ability. .........(cont.) The full review: https://virtualbookshelf.home.blog/2019/02/15/review-normal-in-parenthesis-akagin/ After three chapters, you may request to be assessed again. Thank you, and the best of luck on your writing endeavors! :)

This novel is...different from what I'm used to. The writing quality is fine, there may be a few sentences where words could be swapped with another for better fluency, but that's the least. The stability of updates seem to okay, but I can't comment on that as it is now. The character design for me, Gin was it? He seems like an MC from one of those slice of life anime. But was this deliberate? Since the nature of your novel seems to highlight Gin, a boy who (correct me if I'm wrong) thinks he's normal but in comparison to everyone else, he's really not? Furthermore, this novel felt like a seinen mixed with slice of life manga in novel form. Overall, this novel is pretty deep, considering it deals with finding purpose and consciousness(?) which gives it the seinen feel I mentioned earlier. The beginning was a little dry for me, maybe it's because I steer clear from first person POV novels, but if it's deliberate given the nature of Gin, then it's understandable. Still, I hope this doesn't stop you from writing. It's interesting, just not my type. But Good luck with it!

I think overall the book is great but there is room for improvement such as grammar. I do enjoy the occasional funny moments and I like the use of Japanese names as I am an anime fanatic. The starting can be a little confusing and dry but as I continued reading, it moved on to the character and it is great that you’ve added background information regarding Gin such as the place he lives in. Continue writing and good luck! Do not let any negative comments or review stop you from writing.

Good writing quality, very different from the other novels, which makes it interesting to people who have this kind of genre taste :") keep it up with the good work man :)

The book felt like an anime in novel form. Can see the author making efforts to establish his premise. Fans of classroom settings etc may find this suited to their tastes.

Very different from what I’ve read in the past few days. That’s one of the reasons why I have liked this book. Keep on updating and I look forward to more updates.

I expected a “life changing event” and instead I received a chapter long stream of consciousness about some esoteric crap that goes on inside the mind of the narrator/protagonist. You should keep in mind that readers have the attention span of a golden fish. If in your first page you don’t answer some ****** questions as “What’s the story about? Who’s this guy? What’s happening to him? Why should I care?”, the reader will close your book once and forever.

It's not my type of novel. I have felt like watching school-life anime. I think writing quality is ok. There is probably room for improvement but I am not qualified to say it as my own English isn't that good. I hope you will find readers that enjoy this kind of story! Good luck!