Story plan is well thought out, well I like the setting a little bit too, from the start it intrigued my curiosity. The author is also very careful in description which is most of my liking, this is best piece for greedy readers like me, haha, I hope the author could keep the pace. Good luck.
A very good book series for a beginner actually. Love your use of english words in the mix with the world background. Very good. And your characters are perfectly done. Good job. And I'm having the feeling that you are writing from the first person's view which was you. I might be wrong but the novel seems like you are writing about yourself which is very interesting. Great novel.
Oh My!!!!! Just one word.. Cute... The lead characters are so adorable.. I love how they wait till they are clear about their feelings but can't wait to see each other.
I have seen a lot of Asian dramas and I can imagine the ML clearly but can't imagine the female lead clearly. Maybe because Nigerian Fl is a first for me. But I love this ❤
I thoroughly enjoyed the story. I’m more of a silent reader because sometimes I read all the way through and not comment. As for my thoughts I had a lot of mixed emotions. The story was great, don’t get me wrong!! I only had trouble in the beginning with ML since we didn’t know him well and out of nowhere he comes for dinner lmao but trust me, keep going and it gets better because we see more of the character building for ML and MF bud. It’s a Chinese story too and was interesting because it world built a little around Nigeria as well.
I really like how the updates are frequent, it really makes me able to enjoy and await more chapters to come in the future!! Since I’m new to this site, reviewing and finding new works are a great plus. Don’t hesitate to read :D
HIII! This story is really good, it's very light and gives off the Wattpad vibes in my opinion which is a good thing since it's rare to see novels like this in Webnovel, I really like how you describe the characters and have them communicate realistically, with a few frank remarks from the FL yet still she acts kindly when it comes to meeting a stranger on a spur of the moment. This novel is very light and easy to read and for that, I give you two thumbs up, I can see the time and effort you've put in here and I like it particularly because they did not come from the same socialite circle and culture, nice plot, keep going! I'll add it in my library and read it after my classes, thank you very much! I'm looking forward to every chapter!
The story has an interesting start. A Nigerian and Chinese pair excites me! I'm still on the earlier chaps but im already curious on how would their drastic cultures affect their budding relationship. The world background is a good and well crafted one. Good job and keep the updates going author! Godbless.
You see, I don't read many romance novels. I'm usually just not that into it. But this makes me wonder if I should read more romance novels from now on. I love Tale's character. I love the fact that the story has people from Asian region too, which makes it relatable for me since I am an Asian. And I am really happy to see the frequency of updates for this novel (Which is something I've never been able to do :) Keep up the good work! I'll hold on to this novel!
This story is just going to keep getting better, I feel like the author is aiming at story one can cuddle up with and this is definitely it. The male lead isnt arrogant even if he could clearly be, a little impatient. Then there is Tale, all the way from a far off country. Cant wait to see how the two cultures blend into each other.
What I love about this is that it's a novel featuring an interracial relationship! It's great to have that kind of diversity even within a platform that's already pretty diverse.
The writing in terms of punctuation and vocabulary needs a little work. Maybe a proofreader or application can help you with that.
It starts out as a meet-cute, and that's generally the entire tone of the novel. It's a light, read; no need to bust your brains over intense symbolism or petty drama. It's a nice refresher for when you're overwhelmed by face slapping.
Kudos to the author and happy writing!!
This is definitely interesting! The best part is how a slightly overused concept had been portrayed with a a unique twist. Despite romance not being my forte, this is definitely one of the better ones out there. Keep up the good work!
One word for the story would be "Cute"😍
This is not just any regular, cliche story and I can't wait for further chapters to release! I am glad I came across this novel.
Quicker updates are suggested to improve the rating and popularity, which it deserves!
Review Swap Valid as of Chapter 33
Suggested word changes
• Chapter 1- "She was so sick and tired of being sick and tired" (no need to repeat sick and tired) --> change -->
" Tale was so fed up with constantly being sick and tired."
"She wanted adventure, she dreamed of it --> "Tale wanted adventure and constantly dreamed of it."
"Since he had addressed her"--> "Since he addressed her"
The word "I" should be capitalized. Comas and full stops missing. I suggest using a writing program like grammarly to fix up your punction. Over usage of he and she - just write the character names if you noticed you wrote she or he more than 3 times in a paragraph.
Chapter 11- 🤔 what's with the (1) (2) (3) (4)?
In chapter 12, there's a lot of just speaking dialogue. You should clarify who said these things.
Chapter 25- It's just chicken - description of the chicken?
• Description is important, I know it can be difficult but if you just have the characters talking and not describe their surroundings. The readers will be confused.
Story Development: 🤔 A bit fast paced. The main characters introduction to each other is interesting, no lag between the second meeting. Or rather the first meeting, is it wise to invite over someone you just met to your own home? Su Yan falls for her so quickly. That's fine and all, but it feels like they barely know each other. You could have written more scenes where they spent time together (maybe even a short time skip). The romance progresses very well afterwards - slowly Tale's past is revealed. The same goes for Su Yan.
Character Design: As of Chapter 33, I'm starting to form a proper picture of the characters now. Tale a mischievous girl - but just like any other girl her age she wishes to experience love. But in the process of searching for love, she ends up getting hurt. Su Yan, a cheerful man with a somewhat dark past 🤔
World Background: The opening is very well written, I like how fast the pace is. We get to the key point in the story, and some background information. Could still use some work but I can form a clear picture of the character named 'Su Yan'. Actually I'm surprised we don't learn more about the FL Tale in the opening 🤔
Overall: There's a lot more I want to say. But this review is already top long. For spelling and grammar help, you should use grammarly. Keep it up 😊
Grammar is ok for the most part. This needs some proofreading as periods and commas are missing (most notably for dialogue before the last quotation).
Su Yan and Tale meeting each other and quarreling over food is is funny and different. However, they fell for each other too quickly to be believable, Su Yan more than Tale as of chapter 10. I understand they both are attractive, but even with that and a good personality, it’s rare that both are love at first sight. If they are though, more needs to be included on their thoughts and backstory as to maybe why they’re attracted. For example, they both have scars, is that attractive to Su Yan for certain reason? Anyway, at this point it moves too quickly.
Sidenote: Personally, the phone call with Precious is cute, but making their whole dialogue as the entire chapter is a little much.
The characters construction seems fine; it was just the pace of their relationship as I said earlier that’s the issue. I actually like a multi-ethnic relationship; it’s different! Also, you didn’t introduce lots of characters in 10 chapters, just 4 which are the male leads and their bestie essentially. Good! As long as you delve into them more, this can be a 5.
I have a general idea of the settings and location of the characters as they move, but more details in general could be given as well as more of the characters’ backstory.
WOW!!! This novel is awesome!!! Especially the blend of two different cultures! It's definitely something unique and not cliche. What's more interesting is the fact that you have a main character that resembles you!
Keep writing and this is amazing!!! :D
First I need to say that it's mischievous of you to create more Asian boy dreams in the heads of the poor girls that will fall prey to your story. I'm kidding.
Writing quality is pretty good. Some mistakes here and there that can be corrected with a bit of editing, but nothing that prevents my ability to enjoy the story.
The story progresses steadily, and the beginning can easily be related to (I can relate). So far, the main character is compelling, but I don't have much to say about world background at the moment (then again I'm a sucker for fantasy, so I'm probably biased).
It's a bit soon for me to judge the plot, but I believe your story has a lot of potential for those interested in romance fiction. (like me :D)
Best of luck!