Honestly, its hard to find a decent grammar like this but the execution is quite poor like speech and some small stuff.
The dragon ball is made way too op even though its not and the mc thinks himself as vegeta and hes like i cant wait to meet my wife? Dude bulma is cannon vegeta wife just bcus u took over vegeta body dont talk as if shes your wife he totally accept hes vegeta.
Cannon bulma likes bad bois thats the reason why she keeps up with cannon vegeta and develop a relationship although she can be charmed with one mere look still the way you execute is too poor its cringe and forced.
But i must say it have alot of potential
was good until arthor did a crossover with the other fanfic itβs bs that you did that ruined the story in my opinion also power scaling is way off i donβt care if other mc had a system there is no way in the naruto world
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Love it. I just can't wait for the next chapter.
Best fan fiction I've read in a while. Good character development. The only thing I would have loved was that the power level wasn't evolved like crazy
This is the first story I've ever read in Webnovel, though there's never been an update since last year.
Are you alright?
Because we're really looking forward to seeing you in the future.
hey over god you good? your bio says you love writing are you posting under an alt account now because if so ill ho check it out now because i love all your work
My only complaint is no update and no info for 2 months now and it was just getting to the good part.
The english is great, plot is getting thicker by the second, and the cross over was s very good one too. Hope we see an update soon.
great story about the middle of the night and I was in the middle of the night and I was in the middle of the night and I was in the middle of the night and I was
It is okay for a casual read but everyone pretty much has the same amount of talent as Vegeta and Goku. Villains are easily slain and there isn't allot of ******* in the story.
es una de las mejores novelas que lei respecto al genero... no es perfecta... pero entretiene.........no abusa del haren...y lomejor de todo sabe como fluir la historia
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This is a great Fan Fic, I love most of the Fan Fiction that cones from this Author and am quite sad to see such a great piece be written and finished in under 100 chapters. I feel if the Author tried to add more plot and let the characters grow at a slower pace then this would be a perfect Fan Fic, the characters grew in power way too fast but I also love how fast they grew, that's why I give this Fan Fic a 5 star rating. Keep up the great work Author-kun and keep making great Masterpieces!
"The Main Character is unexpectedly killed by God, and as an apology for his blunder..."
This is how far I had to read, to realize the story is garbage.
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Best Dragon Ball Fanfic I have ever read. Power distribution is superb, arcs are retold in a way that it known but still unknown and is interesting. Hope the author completes his work.
10/10 a little rocky in the early parts but this is really freakin awsome!!!
10/10 a little rocky in the early parts but this is really freakin awsome!!!
10/10 a little rocky in the early parts but this is really freakin awsome!!!
10/10 a little rocky in the early parts but this is really freakin awsome!!!
Start was great but quickly went downhill. Majority of dragon ball is fighting training and the dragon itself, but there is a lot more to it which made it so successful. This story ONLY focuses on power ups and training, rediciously using time room to gain power spending years but it is only described in a couple lines. In manga and or show there where entire episodes dedicated to the process. A lot didnt enjoy that but it added context and perception.
Also what about rest of the race while the mc and group gain so much power wtf they doing.
Lizrock