This story is like Superman, out of the perspective of Lois Lane. And Lois Lane is a dude. The concept is nicely done and the author takes time to create the atmosphere and describe the scenes. There are already some sparks flying (pun intended) between the two male leads.
My only critic is that the boys address each other as "dude". It is just my personal opinion, but I really don't like this word. It makes them seem dumber than they are intended to be. Because otherwise they speak like normal teenagers and not overly "slang" or "ghetto".
I look forward to how this story will develop. But already from the first (very long) chapter it shows great potential. Keep going!