Chapter comments on the chapter Trouble? of the book Omni-Mastery

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90Bry
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90Bry

Stop watering down chapters please!! Also could you please do better context positioning!! Parts of your chapter are cut off or just plain vague at times, if you restructure the sentence like this: "It is just a made up visit, so that they could give us more trouble. They're supposed to arrive within one day! If they come, I fear, that they might know about what actually happened; and you would be in the same boat with us..." "But why would the famous 'Light Association' give you trouble? I heard that they were quite a fair and righteous association. Are you saying that you have enemies with high authority in the association that want to give you trouble?" "Sigh...While it is true that such situations happen too rarely, the association's roots still lie within the 'Light Empire', so if an influential party from the 'Light Empire' uses their connections and pulls a few favors such a situation wouldn't be impossible." The content, could possibly come across clearer and cleaner. Sometimes when reading due to context placement and maybe some time skipping; mentally in my head I'm having to restructure what you've written, or fill in the gaps with other context from earlier or later chapters.
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Maxt
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Maxt

Thanks for a chapter!
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Miguel_Sayjin
puts expected something more solitary, I don't really like groups
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Link_wolf
please don't make them a party pls it so goood with him being solo pls please please please please please
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demonsguild8
See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon
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gmamarble
Good story but what happened to the cub
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DevilKing666
The dark cave is a piece of cake for the MC now
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DarknorthDao
See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon
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jasss22
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jasss22

Thanks for the chapter.
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LuxityRealm
Thanks for chapter.
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