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Derivative_God
Very good characters.
I really like evilish/gray Hermione as a potential love interest, but the story seems to be dead. Out of pure curiosity, are you planning to continue at a later date? Will you never work on this again? Do you care if somebody decides to Necro/revive the book with them continuing it?
But yeah I like the gray characters. Hope this isn't perma-ded
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Belvior
A Harry Potter universe that makes feel like if Tom Riddle had all the info then this is what he would of been like. A story of a boy who is truely cunning.
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DH_
Think itβs a very good potter fic, with potential to be at the top... Donβt know if it will end up being dropped, hopefully not as I have really liked it so far
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Kenta01
Good. A little minus as update seemed to be late. Keep up the work, i think it'll be an amazing story to read if you Can continue. Best of luck to You.
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Aralin
I'm loving it!! I hope more comes out, its one of the greatest HP fanfics I have read! .....................................................
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MoonTree
It's incredible, I love this fic, keep it up, that Jake and Hermione become a couple, make them travel, I don't know, but keep writing a good fic, why it's interesting and incredible.
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KoroSensei14
Love it so far I like how smart and realistic he is and not shortsighted. I could see him becoming a major businessman in the muggle world and a rich powerhouse in the wizard one, possibly even minister to reform the magical world. Hopefully he helps out in someway in this upcoming clash of titans maybe a mental attack or something when heβs weak that way he can take his memories and get a power up and learn weβre the rest of the horocruxes are and all his secret stashes and other stuff he learned later in life. You can still have material for the later movies just with more focus on the death eaters who think they can still resurrect him even though hes dead. Movie 3 would still work with the focus on Sirius and Pettigrew and movie 4 with a focus on fake Mooney and from there on out the rest of the death eaters and pure blood supremicist then vampires/werewolves or other evil beings or beast. Also if you decide to introduce different gods hopefully donβt make them to op or evil like the destroy the world Types (example: dormmamou From marvel) cause thatβs stupid. Truly powerful gods wouldnβt bother with such things as itβs beneath them the only gods that mettle with humanity or wizards in a god or bad way would probably be weaker ones or demigods for entertainment, to get something, or to defend someone or something . If you need a powerful villain maybe devils or demons could work make it like a gods vs. demons thing, good magical beast vs. evil magical beast, good wizards vs. dark wizards etc. that way it wouldnβt be like a him vs. the world thing. Just some ideas, anyways itβs off to a really good start and I love the character and his different way of looking at things then normal wizards
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Lovereading88
Writing Quality: 5/5.
Nothing to say about writing. Really excellent, especially for being a fan fiction.
Stability of Updates: 4/5.
Not so much for the number of chapters, they are good for the quality they offer. Too random days. I hope for some news, calendar or other to be able to understand more or less when to check the page.
Don't misunderstand, it's not a fault of the work or the author, it's my fault, but I can't help it. A review is always subjective.
Story Development: 4/5.
Excellent development of the story. The only thing that I don't find too pleasant is the fact that the protagonist discovers too many things in a short time and I'm not talking that the protagonist becomes Op too early. He discovers places, secrets and other things in too short a time. The speed of the facts is excellent.
Character Design: 5/5.
I love the protagonist and also the characters that already existed in the original work. Why? Each character presented so far is perfectly described, not even the characters from the original books seem. He made these characters his own. Really well done.
World Background: 3/5.
Weak part of the fiction. Need to add new places.
Obviously I recommend the fiction and I will continue to read it myself.
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Otsutsuki_D_Isaiah
Ahhhh so many possibilities... the mc have knowledge but donβt have the power to use it.YET... and the good part is the mc is Muggleborn.. donβt change it for like a hidden inheritance... let him get it to the right of conquest like the Ravenclaw because he cleansed the diadem and the ghost of ravenclaw in the castle give him an inheritance and the Slytherin when he see a portrait of Salazar Slytherin hidden in the chamber of secrets.. And donβt forget the soul of Tom in harryβs scar.. the knowledge of tom there before he vanished...
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TehStorm
Great chapter,i like the way that the story is heading,the only thing that is missing in my opinion is the lack of interactions and dialogs between the MC and the other students.
Also,what happened to daphne and tracey?I got the impression that they would be the MC's friends but they seldom appear in the story.
Anyways,can't wait for the next chapter.
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Phoenix1998
Really good. Keep it up please.Really good. Keep it up please.Really good. Keep it up please.Really good. Keep it up please.Really good. Keep it up please.Really good. Keep it up please.
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cuddlypanda
Love the book so far, like how youβve made the character design for jake and how he interacts with the rest of the world and his thoughts about the world he was put into.
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Phoenix1998
Good story. Update more please. Good story. Update more please. Good story. Update more please. Good story. Update more please. Good story. Update more please.
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TurtleManiacc
LOVe this fucking harry potter fanfic MORE PLZ IW ANT MORE THIS IS MAZING !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Phoenix1998
Really awesome story. Really like the mc learning of magic and gaining knowledge. Really awesome story. Really like the mc learning of magic and gaining knowledge.
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dscot345
This is a great story so far Iβm really enjoying it I love the fact that the character has ambition I feel like a lot of fanfiction the characters are just there to be there and they donβt have a lot of self ambition and this character seems to be cunning and ambitious which I love.
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Grimsoul_Lord
To think that you had an idea to put memory palace in the story so that he could remember every thing he had read or seen... its like a photographic memory..
I loved your story till now.. its very good..ππ₯π₯π₯π₯π₯
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Phoenix1998
Good story. Update more please. Good story. Update more please. Good story. Update more please. Good story. Update more please. Good story. Update more please. Good story. Update more please.
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Phoenix1998
Excellent story so far. Very original. Please keep updating. Excellent story so far. Very original. Please keep updating. Excellent story so far. Very original. Please keep updating.
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Phoenix1998
Really good story. Please update more. Really good story. Please update more. Really good story. Please update more. Really good story. Please update more.
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Landon_Sorenson
This is honestly the best Harry Potter fanfic I have ever seen.. it is outstandingly made overall and I would recommend it to those who wish to read a good book.
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xdestruct0x
Gracias por los capΓtulos esta interesante, espero con ganas como se desarrollara la historia _-_ ........................................................................................................................................................................................... -_-
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Gabriel_Lopes
Cara,vocΓͺ estΓ‘ fazendo um trabalho incrΓvel nessa histΓ³ria atΓ© agora,por favor continue xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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shady_elf
I read the original story and I have to say, this is much better. The writing quality improved dramatically, and it was decent to begin with. The story is far more detailed, and I'm looking forward to more.
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