I lost interest * Sigh * .... (Not worth continuing, basically the protagonist is going to be a beta MC, seriously who would let any random woman hit your face ?, Well I would not let ... * Surely I would deviate , or held the hand *)
It's just me that imagining Medea calling "Hubby" feels ticking off? She's a Witch who has lived for who knows how long and just because she "married" someone she would call then like that? Doesn't matter how I think this isn't her character.
This is the better dialogue format for a book however if you have a scene with alot of dialogue you may want to just add the speakers name afterwards in brackets. But you haven't needed to care about it so far. Good job on the transition it just reads of storyness now less playlike.
~ Akumu, The Semi-Immortal Cat