Reviews of Ah Chun: Ascending The Heavens by invayne - Webnovel

First off, I hesitate to write reviews for two reasons. The first is they usually get deleted, and the second is I know how much a review can impact an aspiring author. However. I feel the need to review this book. I have given myself some time to cool off so my review is more objective. To start, what you did right. The way the main character acts as a young child and amazing powers was well done. She throws tantrums for no reason, is easily influenced by her mother, and gets pouty. Her anger issues result in what a normal toddler would do, such as hitting someone, it just is more deadly. The swiftness with which the story progresses is nice. Usually wuxias take forever and a day to get anywhere. This book has a good pace. Finally, there is little to no grammar errors in this book. It is either well edited or you have great English. Now what I think you did wrong The "sudden change" in ah chun's behavior, while you had a good reason for it, was poorly executed. Yes, she needed to grow up and change her attitude, and 99 lives would do it. However, this was a prime example of telling and not showing. You told us what she experienced, but it was so fast and sudden that it feels more like you rewrote the character to fit the tone and need of the story, rather than having her grow into it. Character development is an important part of a novel, and I don't think it was done well here. Second, the way she falls for the male lead. Frankly,, it was bad. Yes, 99 lives is a good excuse, but again, telling not showing. It feels more like a forced romance than something that was built up over the time you said it was (99 lives). Furthermore, having it happen so fast removes the point of the "is t love" chapters, and the point of that little girl at all. Removing her from the story would change literally nothing. For someone you placed such emphasis on early, she ended up being nothing but a filler character. I don't have a problem with her loving Shen, the issue is how "fast" it happened. OverallC I blame this on what I believe to be your want to write a romance novel overriding your patience in setting it up. Also, the dialogue between female lead and male lead is...not well executed, multiple long paragraphs about them gushing how they will be forever together and never betray each other is not even remotely close to how lovers talk in real life (at least in my experience). I found myself skipping paragraphs because it was awkward to read and really had no impact on the story. Overall, a great story was messed up by a portly executed good idea (samsara). My advice is try to take time to develop the characters and not simply change them to fit your will. While your characters are your creation, inside the story they are their own people, and need to grow like a real person would.

Ah Chun finally grows her body according to what her actual age is and she has gained new powers. Not only that, there seems to be a mysterious and powerful bloodline in her that she didn't know about. Can't wait to read more.

Nice story to read with a fun strong willed FL. First story I read where the main char actually is reborn multiple times. Sometimes she is a bit unreasonable towards strangers though, ruining their reputation even though they did not do anything to her. But i guess that's just her character.

It is starting to get interesting with Ah Chun thinking and acting like an ***** despite the fact that she is physically a child. She also has developed feelings toward Ning Jin. I'm liking this novel so far, can't wait to read more.

A great read, I really really enjoyed reading the story. kudos to the author, keep the good work up. Will read up your other novels. Please hurry and post the other chapters of the novel, can't wait to continue reading Ah Chun's adventures.

Love the book you had a great story going, but I have to say the reset is a bit off putting. Out of the blue being betrayed for no reason whatsoever and having her go through power upping another time is kinda annoying. Also the fact that the ability system changed all of a sudden was also a large shock. Sorry if I offended you in any way but to me, it feels like you just kinda got a hiatus and decided to restart the story.