The update is not that stable yet the author always does a mass release which is great. The story is weaving and developing nicely. Though the story is not more on dialogues but more on narrations, it is still good. I love how you put different languages on your story and showcasing your local mythological gods and goddesses. Good job!
Not sure what the significance is for writing Tagalog when your characters understand each other but it is different. As for the story, it would probably flow better if you worked on your grammar, spelling and spacing. In Chapter five you have the god of time saying that the FL ate Clara? Not sure what you were going with that but if she really was going to eat Clara please expand or explain. Cannibalism from someone who tries to help others, wow you got imagination!
Never apologize for how short or long your chapters are, you be you and write until you are satisfied.
How old is your FL? I know she's in school but I assumed like young... So on to the review.
Based on only the first 5 chapters, grammar is mediocre, it disrupts the flow of the story pulling you out of the whatever scene you are picturing. Some spelling mistakes and some paragraphs are mistakenly broken.
Characters are still developing, too early to figure out what's going on but this can also be a negative. FL is definitely stubborn, lacks patience and wisdom but is a driven by selflessness. It's a solid foundation and makes you want to read more just so you can see her growth but the time god... Is still a giant question mark, sadistic or bored, read more chapters to find out.
World background/development, not a lot to go by but is more then the others I've read, so good effort and keep it up. Time travel, mystery and FL who thinks they can save the world... Why not?
Fantastic way of drawing audience in, quote comical as well. Portrays a naive little teenage girl given a powerful item really well. Made me went through time, looking forward to seeing more in the future.
I like the whole premise! Nice writing style but I can't say it's flawless but I know the author will improve along the way. Hope you continue writing and won't drop this novel. it's good that it showcases the Philippines time which makes me happy and proud. Good luck on your journey!
A five star!
Writing quality, definitely good. Thumbs up for that. I love how you wrote in Filipino in between, I would do the same, but I'm too scared of ruining the story. In your case, it was perfecto.
Updates, saw the days, seems regular to me.
Story development, yep, it's getting weaved slowly and quite nicely if I might say so. The cliff hangers especially, make me want more. Welp, not exactly cliff hanger... But it does make you want to read more. (I'm so sorry, it's hard to explain since my English isn't good, not my first language)
Character design, so far, I can tell the character depth... Though it's more of a personal skill here XD
World background, The novel has just started. So I'll give this a five, in hopes for better description.
All the best to you!
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