I really like the story. My only problem’s are the updating frequentcy, and the grammar quality. It could be an amazing fanfiction story if you Rewrite it with correct grammar and punctuation. Anyways I hope you continue writing this story .
The story is bad, there's nothing more to it.
The author has a mediocre grasp of the English language and has an annoying habit of writing meandering redundant sentences.
The cannon characters' characterizations are poorly executed, to the point that I'm wondering if he's had anything more than a passing familiarity with the material.
The main character is a bad guy a villain if you will, not an anti-hero. He murders and tortures people as a first resort, and only cares for his own benefit. His supposed care for his family is shallow, barely skin deep.
And the dialogue waffles between barely believable and so edgy I'd have it cut my lawn.
Pass if you value your time.
Did u drop this hasn’t been a new chapter in a while like the story overall not a good guy but not a bad guy don’t make this just a **** story please lol
Cant read more than 3 characters its so bad it really needs to get better spelling the facts are not correct the author can’t do simple math this story is a train wreck
Melodramatic, subpar novel. Author did not really thought out or organized his take on MC characteristic. MC is suppose to be genius and powerful sorcerer but is more like a idiot when dealing with possible oppositions. Really a waste of time. Nothing to really wow or awe the readers. This synopsis pretty much sums up this novel:” MC is a loner and loser. Dies and get reincarnated with op system. Becomes a genius beyond Tony Stark level. Cunning enough to play with the military and make secret army that can take over a country. Becomes a little idiot bitc* just cause Gotham villain might harm him or his family..” Like wtf is Wong with author. Read till ch 60 and nothing noteworthy of this novel. Fawking cunt waste of time novel.
what i can say , the character is good and the world is being mold by him like shoud be and the history is too good
BUT EVERYONE NEED MORE CHAPTERS HAAAA
author i beg of u dont listen to the diss and continue writing im loving it so dont drop im serious please i beg of u ....................................................................
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Writer for the first several chapters used no form of elaboration, adjectives or anything that would make the story feel real. Just blank statements. This reads like a history book at best. Just raw info, no quality
Not really enjoying the way things seem to be developing with the latest chapters.
So a break of sorts seems to be in order so I thought reviewing now would be as good a time as any.
With the most recent chapter (66) I've finally decided to back off until more chapters amass to possibly update or review at a later date.
This story like so many others of a similar type( system, opmc, si, universe hoping, and most recently things seem to be pushed towards a possible harem route) is best described as scatter brained.
Rather than building up the characters or world the plot seems to randomly be jumping around with little direction other then the typical underlying goal of most stories which is getting stronger.
The writing quality leaves quite a lot to be desired but the fact the author (I believe) isn't a native English speaker excuses some of the confusion in that regard. Chapter lengths are fairly short which is a plus if you only have a few minutes to read.
The updates apart from the first month, amount to around 4 chapters a month, so loosely a chapter a week.
Development of the story is slow to say the least. Things the MC wishes to protect are seemingly thrown to the way side. As a result their characters haven't really been developed other then occasional mentions as the focus of his aim to gain more power.
The worlds that have been introduced so far are from Comics and Movies so a lot of the world building included is heavily drawn on knowledge outside of the story itself. Much like the characters the world isn't very descriptive or immersive.
Overall the story can be an entertaining read if you can look past some of the chaotic choices of the author and MC.
dont know why there are do many negatives, it may be not good at the start, he may be sometimes dancing around the thumb of his gf like beta, but it gets very good after he went to gotham, more action and gets somewhat OP and travels into different dimensions...
Man please update more.I am loving this story'
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I only read till chapter 3
I am sorry to give a low recommendation but this is because I am someone who believes in the line THE CHILD SHOULD NOT PAY FOR THE SINS OF THE FATHER and this is exactly what you did in chapter 3 I don't know if u changed this in later chapters and I don't want to know Even though DC is dark I honestly would have kept reading if the person who ordered their death was a villain but u make it the Mc father and that is just something that doesn't sit right with me
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This book is a excellent example of a fan fiction where the main character is smart, cunning, and powerful. I really like the part where the main character is a scientist and a mage. Really awesome story with a ruthless main character just the way I like it.
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