I need MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOORRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE
In my opinion the story itself has potential however the missuse of the tenses together with a wave of information from the first chapters made me feel confused as to what was going on.
To add to that, the switching between new characters' POV was a fail because at the start I always thought it was the ML unless specified otherwise. Their speech also did not seem different so the switch did not feel complete.
Nevertheless the story seems to have plenty of action scenes and a good background to work on. I just wished I could have learned all the new info in time.
All in all nicely done.
After reading the story until now, the story is great but also complicated as many type of civilizations are combined in same story, for this kind of story there must be a continuous flow but during reading I had some problems following the process as some part miss details and make it disconnected from the previous part, I liked the characters and how author come up with different types of writing styles to write
Alien species language, the grammar needed to be improved, I have one suggestion, go for the quality not the quantity, through Story is good it lack details, this kind of story really need that, so work on it, like making a chapter where all civilizations are explained .
So best of luck, author
The story is very interesting story. The scenery and the characters actions is best described. However, punctuations and grammar issues needs to be proofread and be corrected.It's best to find someone to edit it. Keep it up author!
I gave u 5⭐️ for the story and detailing. Im not gonna go through grammar issues and full stops. I know you are aware of it. The story itself was good enough to get 5 stars. Keep writing and I’ll support you 😉good luck!!!
It's a good story for the most part, of course the grammar has room for improvements but that's not a problem at all, I like the main character, but as he is already developed at the beginning it poses the problem of him seeming kind of dull.
This is an awesome book! The idea is great! We have a cultivation world with a start... but then, it's actually Sci-fi! A cultivator ending up becoming a Sci-fi! This is Genius!
The writing quality could definately use some work but other than that it's really well done. I love the MC's personality! There was some good world background for the Cultivation planet and I'm interested to see what the author has in store for the rest of this universe.
I'm also interested in finding out how other people fight without the use of Qi like cultivators do!
Definately a must read novel! I trust that the author will do a fine job with this novel :)
Quoting the title I'm really looking forward for the story to justifiably fit tp that. Talking about the plotline it's for the fantasy lovers who wants the fusion of action. The actionscript is really compelling along with the world background matched to it. The error lies with the punctuations as there aren't any stops or pauses to indicate the structural analysis of the story. Yet it's readability is fine with the good vocabulary. ❤
I read this up to chapter 13
I did not know what to expect when I read the synopsis, but once I read the story, it was pretty impressive. The author did an excellent job with writing on the world background. The description was good and vivid. The story definitely has potential.
I don't usually mind grammar and misspellings, but I hope the author can look at the punctuations. Also, some of the paragraphs were too long. It would be good if you can break them up into shorter sections.
Good luck, author!
I have to admit, I'm hooked. The cultivation system is thought out, very traditional. I like the mc, its more rare to have one instantly op but it's a change of pace. Only complaint i could have is the few grammatical ones, but its nothing unreadable.
This is Brandon gould I am responding to a review swap for this book so you can give a review on my book.
First off I think it is a good book and I liked the chapters I read, But in my own opinion I think your MC is a Gary Stew. A Gary Stew is the male version of a Mary Sue.
Now I read up to the fourth chapter. I think the world you created is very unique and interesting.
Your MC can be overpowered but he needs weakness. I think he is a gary stew is because he has no flaws,
Your MC is God and you have made a MC that can't die, or loss must pepole would find that type of MC boring.
A Overpowered MC can be done you just got to let the bad guys beat up your MC and give him some weakness
Just giving my opinion
Hope to see that review
Hey guys! The story is amazing. Just a glimpse of one chapter just boom! captivated my attention and It seems like I can't stop reading until the end cos of your good work.. Nice work and keep it up. 👍
Liking the story so far. The author described the realms well and was very vivid in narrating the scenes. Though I am not into fantasy novels, this got me interested.
My only comment so far is the lack of the use of punctuations, particularly a period. Still, it did not affect how the story was told so it's not a big deal.
I am looking forward to this one. I stumbled on to it while browsing comments. I am adding it to my library for now but I will read it when I get time. And I would like to add one thing, It would be better if you could add a few more details to synopsis. So that it will become easy for people to know about the story.
And though I never read about adventure but it will be interesting.
This is an interesting story that is certainly worth your time. The world building is solid with mechanics and rules that help flesh out the tale. The main MC is a cool guy too.
I did notice a few grammar errors but they don't really break the flow of your reading so it's no big issue. As an action-adventure tale, I give this novel the two-thumbs up and recommend it.
Keep up the good work, author. :)
The premise of the story is depicted clearly. The world building is accordingly, as everything is explained in great detail for the reader.
Sadly, the quality of the grammar is rather poor. I believe this work has the potential to grow into more, but on the condition that the overall quality improves.
I wish you a lot of fun writing the rest of your story.
An interesting novel, a lot of action from the very first lines. But why did the killers go on a frontal attack? And not as a property, they quietly entered the courtyard without attracting any attention? what was the point of dressing in black if they went on a head-on attack? Then it seems to me that I need to somehow clarify this IMHO.
First story indeed :D Looks promising, but there's still plenty to improve - especially in formatting and capitalization of letters. Here's my initial review as a support (subject to changes, once book is complete) Cheers, RandomGuy!
Like the writing and the story, especially with the main character that looks awesome, nice. Although some words looks more longer but it's still okay. And some parts are still confusing but I would see how it goes