Excellent story with unique elements! Very impressed so far. Would like to see more descriptive words used to describe how everyone looks, it’s hard to image what everyone looks like. Other than that, no complaints!
The plot of the novel is interesting, but the beginning is somewhat chaotic.
The story is really inspiring and it has potential!
It is written in a clear and simple language, the text is mostly smooth, without semantic roughness.
An artfully twisted plot, with each new chapter he begins to shine brighter and brighter!
However, the novel contains scenes - violence, those who do not like it should know it.
Therefore, I didn’t read further, although the novel was written in a fascinating way, I dislike the scenes of violence and when they are described in an overly detailed way. This is not what I wanted to read. Everyone has their own choice of genres.
Good xianxia work. Read up to 11 chapters before giving this review. The writing quality is very good, the FL character fits her role very well and the xianxia world background is on point. I like the progress of the story line too, it isn't breaking unnecessarily. Great work. Keep it up.
There are quite a few grammar errors in your story. Also it makes no sence for the boss of the heavenly palace to only cast that girl down to the mortal relm and restrict her to gold core stage. That is far to merciful for what she did. She obviously killed a bunch of important people and that slap on the rist is the punishment.simply impossible..Also your storry does not flow smoothly enough you wrote "start of flashback" then "end of flashback" to tell readers you were having a flashback obvious red flag right there.Plus i dont feel as though she even needed a flashback there it felt so out of place. In addition because she got kicked out of the celestial relm isent she supose to be a super bad ass that does not care about the celestial relm their laws and should give no fucks about loosing all of her cultivation. I really feal like punishment is just to light.
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