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RedLaw
Interesting story. The premise is the kind that make you want to see what will happen later. It's beautifully done. The character personality are clear and it's easy to distinguish them.
Good work
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Kari_Rakitan
This story starts out with some amazing description as well as a sense of intrigue. It captures the reader's attention right away and then gets into some more relatable characters.
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zd4zaaa
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KenRingdomstory
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Demonic_Ogre
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ShinSungmi
The writing style is quite easy to read. However it would seem better if the story was descriptive at some parts and if the pace was much slower. Anyway, good job!
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luciel_707
Its great story so far and another book that's easy to understand. Like the other peeps says, your improvement by every chapter was a great achievement! But improve more and more and maybe you'll be the one of the top authors in webnovel^^.
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Cynk_Napp
In a world where specialized handheld weapons instantly appear, what does that make of your life. How much war would take you away? How much outside influence of assigned personnel would make you regret human contact?
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Aysel_Inara
First of all the story has potential the way it's written, I agree to all persons who gave suggestions above in other reviews. The mythology portrayed is wonderful though I don't know much about this and perhaps that's the reason why it intrigued me the most. The only flaw is with the extra fast pace and other such things as using pronouns and certain things that dragged the story down because of lack of world background. It isn't clear where the action took place and the whereabouts of MC is also vaguely discussed. Everything went like a tornado without any explanation of events, which brought down the interest and that's the thing should be corrected.
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glaurunglives
The novel draws on local mythology fairly well and the actions scenes are quite distinctive. The writing could use a little polishing- but the novel is still quite enjoyable.
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kazesenken
As far as I have read so far, this novel appears to be the story of a boy being transported into a magical, apocalyptic world that has been ravaged by monsters. As the boy gets saved by a girl monster slayer, he himself gains a similar power to fight them off. Seeing this, he joins her in an academy of sorts that trains slayer.
It's not the most creative of plots, which makes it a bit difficult to latch onto. As I was reading, I felt that there was just something missing, a unique gimmick, a hook persay, that would draw in the reader to click the 'Add to Library' button. I'm not saying at all that the plot is uninteresting, in which I do see potential. But there seems to be a lack of something eyecatching, the moment that makes you think, I want to read more. With the large variety of novels that use similar tropes, the author should think carefully how to distinguish itself from others.
Some people may disagree with me on this, but I personally did not see that moment.
The writing itself is decent, but I would be careful with your sentence flow, which tends to repeat and be simplistic. One example is how you often start sentences with, "MC does this or he sees that." Vary the flow a bit.
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CherShootX
Still just 7 chapters so far.
What I like is that the Author used mythology as the world background of the story. It was quite rare to find a novel heavy with mythology and technology merging.
Style are fine but I suggest you to be quite consistent on long or short paragraph. The long one is quite annoying to read and the one line paragraph feels incomplete for some reason.
Grammar are good, not much mistake and readable.
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LIght_Novel_San
Honestly, I'm still in th phase of getting to know the book and right now, It's hard for me to give a review but lemme sum it up.
1. Its creatures are very unique. I think it's based on Filipino folktales right? If it's me, I'll ponder for at least a week whether I could continue a book like this.
2. Grammatical glitches but that's just fine.
3. Because its settings is kind of complex, I suggest that you describe them (surrounding, people, etc.) as intricate as posiible but not to the point of info dump.
4. Put footnotes, especially about the creatures you used (their backgrounds) so you don't need to mention it in the later chapters and prevents info dumps.
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Gourmet_DAO
Honest review
In two chapters, it is very difficult to evaluate the work. But the first impression is this:
The story looks interesting, science fiction, a combination of the apocalypse and the modern world, monsters, the struggle with them, and as the creative imagination of the author further suggests.
But there are some minuses, this is the complexity of the plot, jumping from one thought to another. For example, the end of chapter 1 and the beginning of the 2nd swarm. It is not entirely clear that some part of the conversation was lost.
And the description of the characters is not entirely complete, I have already indicated this in the comments. I myself, as an author, also have the same problems, but now I see them. With which he shared with you. Maybe there’s no need to say that he met a beauty, then there’s no need to describe her? And just met a black-haired girl? But does it make any sense that she has black hair? Do they mean some kind of belonging to scattering? To the clan? Give some magic powers? The same applies to the color of the dress? Why are they described in the novel? Will you as an author return to this in other chapters? If not? Maybe she doesn't care what color her dress was? Well, I'm not special in this, just expressing my thoughts.
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