Decent start - main critique is that it flows very mechanically and feels like a robot is the narrator (however it's understandable considering you probably used grammarly which corrected the grammar and typos). If you can get yourself a native english speaker/editor to go over it and just switch some words around it would be golden.
Interesting first chapter, I definitely like the premise, but so far the first chapter feels a bit stiff and mechanical, but I am looking forward to how the story Like you said, you can improve in time, and at least the grammar is pretty good. Thanks for the chapter .
Democratis