the writing quality is great and the background is also good but the story progresses a bit too fast at the beginning and the main character's personality design is a bit bad it looks like your trying to add both an emotional character at the Grand Army chapters but also trying to make him cool and collected which just doesn't fit for me.
One of the best Storys I've ever read. Keep up the great work. I wait for every new Chapter you will publish and can't wait to see how the story gonna continue.
the story is good, unfortunately the MC is too annoying, well he too often gives gifts to and fro like a fool, too emotional, and during the past 2 years his personality has not developed at all, well the point is this MC spoils this story, 1. too good, 2. too often apologize, 3. less domineering 4. idiot 5. idiot 6. idiot, wow it sucks
This has been really good. Definetly check it out and dont leave before trying atleast like 5 chaps. IT DEFINETLY DOESN'T HAVE A LOT OF FIGHITING OR BUSSINESS WAR. But still its a great read.
I think the story could be written more smoothly avoiding useless details and repeating dialogues.
I find the general idea, like setting and type of #system, quite good and original but could have been developed better.
Being "just for fun" is quite a good job
I really like the idea of this story, but it goes down hill real fast when it comes to the show don't tell. There is often a mention of a fascinating moment between characters, but I would prefer if the reader could actually get to experience these moments.
One of the things the author gets well tho, is that the characters actually seem somewhat real. With the exceptions of the clones, but I suppose that is story related. Although at one point there is one that wants equality for clones and people, which doesn't really make sense with clones shown.
To finish off: the writing is meh. It is readable, but there are plenty of spelling and type errors.
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absolutely, amaizing book. wish there were more chapters every week. But I can tell the writer is working hard to get them out.
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liking the story very much but the novel releases are too slow please update more the story is very interesting and intriguing loved all the characters
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Story is good but too streched out.... very slow paced but good world building and descriptions of fight scenes and situations and good character development just slow.... keep up the good work but improve grammer and pace
Good story ... Nothing or no role of MC
Good story ... Nothing or no role of MC
Good story ... Nothing or no role of MC
Good story ... Nothing or no role of MC
Overall a 5 star because- 1- The story is not like those typical chinese system story. 2-It have a good background. 3- It actualyy using logic the only thing in my opinion that is not logic is everything that is related to system. 4-MC is a good character. never seen this type of MC. The MC is not like any other MC in other novels. 5-he doesnt rely on the System so it means he doesnt rely on plot armor to much.
very good novel, the writer has been very precise about the details and it should be given more attention ,updates should be increased for readers to enjoy!
I love this book deserves more recognition, the storyline is fantastic, I wish there was more chapters to readππ. overall one of the best books on here
I really love this novell. It has a good managing or "kingdom building" that I love very much. The only thing that I really want the author to do, is to bring back MC from adventure back to home. It is the only thing that I can complain about this novell.
Thanks for the hard work author. :)
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this is a pretty great story. it has a nice development and the characters are well developed. of course it suffers from a lot of stuff webnovels suffer from like the mc is too op and stuff along those lines. however this doesn't really effect the story in anyway. it's almost like a popcorn movie where you kinda just turn your brain off and enjoy the fun ride. it's just a lot of fun. if you are looking for a fun story you should check this out
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