The story is great! The chapters are a bit iffy because of some word mistakes and such, but man, a VR Moba that's similar to Lol and Dota 2? Count me in! The story really picks up after the first few chapters, although the MC isn't OP and lacks any knowledge of the game, but he's equipped with very great swordsmanship, courtesy of Mr. Ghost-san.
The character development is also pretty clear and I can't wait to read more. I'd like to see how our MC takes his unambitious character and changes it for the better!
This novel is spectacular! As a huge fan of Sword Art Online, this novel is right up my alley. I love the inside and outside of the game, growth and development of this character. Looking forward to reading more of this and can’t wait to see what happens!
I miss this novel so much😭😭!!! But seriously, I would love for him to finish this novel. However, he actively works on 2 other novels which are more popular. I would hate 2 see his work suffer from trying to do too much.
One word STUPID. I read til 113 but can't take it anymore, the author is just pure stupid.
The author really is a stupid as spider, 100%! Missing? Gank? Wow, what are they 2yr old kids? Missing is missing, what part of it that's difficult to understand? He's trying to create an obstacle for the team just so to put more importance to Alex but he's really bad at it. What a stupid author, nothing new same as in his other novel making his char stupid.
IM DONE with this stupid author, writing a novel is all good, but you have to use your head as well, common sense, logic, etc. So much for multi writing. No quality at all. Bye
Começo meio ruim, mas não desista, depois fica melhor
Há diversos erros de gramática, mas nada que comprometa o entendimento da obra.
O jogo em si parece meio raso, mas por ser um jogo ele pode ter atualizações no futuro
I just love you're novels and style! It's basically perfect. Most novels are annoying to read because they don't engage with the world, And MC doesn't talk much. But not you, you make the world fun, the characters interesting, and you make the clichés still exciting. And nothing feels rushed. And I love that.
Really good story, but hard to get through due to the level of grammar and vocabulary. I think it would be a lot better if the author collaborated with someone who excels in English to rewrite the story in a more readable way. Other than that, no complaints at all.
Not a professional breakdown of anything but here is what I think.
So boring. Granted I didn’t read much, and maybe it gets better, but what I did read started to bore me quickly. The start of a story should be the good but with it getting stale towards the end, but this was just tedious to read. The idea is cool, and if it was done well it could of been good, but it wasn’t. The MC was pathetic, and there were at least two plot holes. Arthur was supposedly amazing, yet he wasn’t even that good. Supposedly 80% of households watch people play, yet the MC didn’t even know the basic rules of the game. Didn’t make sense to me, I’ve never played some games yet I know how to play them. Another thing, who would just allow a spirit to control your body. It would be horrifying, imagine it. Not being able to control what you do, just being a passenger in your own body. It’d scare he **** out of me. Last thing I’ll mention is that Arthur wanted to create an unbeatable sword art, yet didn’t immediately try and teach his sword art to the MC. That didn’t make sense to me. Having another person well versed in your sword art would allow you to see flaws in it. Just my opinion, and I’ve only read about 20 similarly themed novels.
The start is all right it doesn’t do anything exciting but after chapter 25 or so it really starts to pick up￼￼ becoming very interesting and one of the best novels I’ve seen.
It deserves way more attention￼￼ then what its receiving￼ and I can’t wait to see where the story goes ￼￼￼
Overall pretty good. I just would habe liked a little more creativity. I mean why do you have to make it soooo obvious that you are inspired by leage of legends? You arent just inspired by LoL you almost copyed the whole game design for the vr game in your story. But whatever i stopped reading at chap 4 because i think its too similar to lol and i cant read somerhing like that.
Regarding grammar and such there are no complains on my side. The first 3 chaps where also pretty nice but oh well looks like ill have to look for some other novel to read.