Reviews of The First Hero Origins by Bahtiyor - Webnovel

Captivating and utterly absurd in the best of ways. An entertaining read with a storyline that leaves you wanting for more. The author succeeds in putting together a charming story that grasp you from the first few lines and refuses to let go. I applaud your work and hope to see more of you in the future.

Let me type out my actual ratings because the overall ratings are not quite enough. Writing quality: 4s Sentences were properly written. No major errors besides some incorrectly phrases and a few misspelled words. Pacing is somewhat slow (something that even I am guilty of doing) but it's sufficient to show what's going on. Lots of nice descriptions. Update stability: 2 Dunno, really. Story development: 3 Would definitely prefer that the scenes didn't jump about so much between characters. I read till chapter 11 and still don't know who the protagonist is. It's some sort of supernatural murder mystery. There was gore but I wasn't really creeped out. One reason could be my high tolerance and the other could be because the writing was not immersive enough. I would suggest the Author to watch some true videos about actual murders before writing more gruesome stories. Character design: 2 As said in the previous point, I couldn't really connect with the characters. Maybe because it's still early into the book. Some characters had unnatural reactions to their surroundings, e.g. The guy's reaction to Tom's state. (He was scared but it wasn't written quite right). Another major mistake was with the dialogue which sometimes felt out of place, e.g. In the ending of chapter 10. World background: 3 There are very drastic changes with the social environment and they keep changing in each chapter. Two months is not enough to fully stop the economy of a place that was hustling and bustling with tourists (despite the various cases happening). I had to mentally fill in all the blanks like how I do to various other novels. I do hope my review was not too hurtful and offensive. It was a good book but I expect better. Another thing that I want to say is that this was supposed to be a light novel (unless you say it's not) and the writing styles are vastly different from traditional novels. Although you put enough spacings between paragraphs (para break after every three or four sentences), it still felt a little like a traditional novel. Light novels are far more compactly written. Thank you.

Even from the first lines, you're already capturing me. I feel like I can't let go of your story. Because It has an entertaining storyline that makes me want for more. It's a bit gore but... who cares?! As long as It's good! Keep up the good work!

What a start. I think there's more to come, and I'm until that comes out. Characters are well rounded and interesting. Conflict isn't simple but has other underlying conflicts within the major one. The world development is phenomenal.

I love the gradual exposure of gore in this novel. There isn't a lot of them, but when described it freaks you out. Thinking back on a few chapters still creeps me out. That's not the only thing, of course. I love the character dynamic, the premise, and I hope I would see more.

I love this novel in many ways. One thing is that the characters represent different states of moral, social, and emotional growth. And, the author gradually demonstrates the protagonists' change in behavior over time.

'umiez ain't hav'n fun. Im 'umiez are be'n tricked and slaughtered. Is what a Greenskin would say. And it isn't far off. The people of Black Pyrite are not having a fun time, nor will they since in this novel the humans have very little to do against these alien beings. But who doesn't like an underdog story?

Before the review a warning. This is a gruesome novel. Not every chapter will be like that, but when they are the author really get's under your skin ("pun" intended) This is incredible, it is weird, quirky and absurd in the best of ways. It feels like Dirk Gently had a love child with Mars Attacks. The characters are likable and fun, the writing is a treat never getting too long or drawn out. Not only that but the world feels alive, not just a bunch of stereotypical characters doing whatever, They have an action and reaction relationship with the world. Definitely give it a chance if you are up for something a little different.

I read it till chapter 4, the story was pretty engaging and made me wanting for more, the writing was simple and plain so there was no difficulty in understanding the story... ill noticed the same mistakes I made in this novel also, the author is mostly telling rather than showing its not only my view I sent the link to my friend in writer's group and asked his opinion he said the same thing, the author need to describe a character's feelings about what they see before them what thoughts going on in their mind etc. other than this the story is unique, interesting and keep the reader hooked no doubt in that, this is a story that has the potential to reach next level since clearly the author has superb storytelling skills I think this will turn out to be a good novel

This story is amazing and has great potential! While diving into this tale I was able to empathize for the characters as if I was one of them. I also enjoyed this humor.