I like very much the changes you made, keep writing, thanks for your hard working, hope you can continue to update with new chapter, take care and thanks bye
-the main character is getting a bunch of things way to fast
-DETAILS
-establish who the **** the mc is
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If you have a thing for a arrogant easy provoke mc that it is for you. I just watch 29 chapter and I wish I was dead I seriously hate the mc personality and can't the author do better on the dialogue. The romance kinda force it together I make this as I drop the series
But I must say great update
More more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more and thanks π.
Your story is awesome and nice. But I think you should make a chapter where all the powers and abilities of the MC are noted. I hope that you keep working hard like this and your work is improving day by day. Don't listen to haters and please continue this story.
I like it when when mc has multiple powers but it doesnt suit Black Clover, it'd be great if Asta only got the haki and the human devil hybrid plus the training dimension with no other powers. Just simple ability but powerful
-how the hell he got strong to be on par with magic knight captain at the age of 12 isnt his power levelling is too much
-i dont even know if he use the yamato correctly because in the past chapter i read i didnt see him cut space
-the story progress with the harems is too fast he is still a kid and he already has like 4 harem
-i dont even know what kind of sword arts he is praticing or how good is he on it
-im fine with dmc weapon but i dont even know what main weapon and sub weap is he gonna use is it the yamato,rebellion, or the two demon sword that original asta use
Writing quality:οΏΌ I mean Iβve seen worse but still this person needs a lot of practice and needs to learn more about basic human interactions for instance how humans would interact with each other in the scenario that thisοΏΌ story is based onοΏΌ. Your grammar is also pretty bad I recommend you use something like Grammarly. And if you donβt know how to spell her name look it up like use F A N D O M or just G O O G L E either one worksοΏΌ.
Stability of updating: pretty good so far
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Story development: I mean I like where the story is going but you did say that he wouldnβt be OP he is beyond OP I mean he has too many abilities not only that but most of his abilities are way over powered
οΏΌ character design: character design is actually pretty good just going off of the main character in my opinion but like I said your basic human interaction and reactions are not good at allοΏΌ
World background: I mean itβs a fanfiction I donβt have much to say about thatοΏΌοΏΌ but I do like where itβs goingοΏΌοΏΌ
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Very cool 10/10 ;) make sure to never drop novel is extremly good ................... ........................................................................
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