A short and wonderful story with a high quality. I love the author's writing style, it was impressive. The plot was short, interesting to the point it makes me motivated to finish all seven chapters. The pace is smooth, the quality of writing is great. No grammar errors spotted or anything that I know of. Well done author!
That last chapter...
This is a wonderfully narrated story, the plot is beautiful and the whole story is unique and amazing. The Author has a magnificent style of storytelling that evokes emotions. The story is very meaningful and something to learn from.
I recommend this story!
Well done! And if there is a second part to it, you got a fan here :)
This was a really, really great story.
Well, it's not perfect, but it does take you in in a tide of emotions. I loved the colorful way the author wrote it. I could easily imagine the scenarios and if this was an anime, I would imagine just how the scenes would transition out. In fact, I think this can be a really great script for an animated short. I'd help out the author in making one if I knew the people who could help out, but sadly, I don't have the connections. On another note, the pacing was absolutely wonderful, and frankly, it's one of the best I've read in this platform.
It's not so often people can read anything as filled with humanity and intrigue as this piece. Go on and read it, and find out why I like it so much.
(Note to author: Listed below are a few things you can do to improve the piece:
-General grammar: usage of commas, cutting down long sentences, using the right punctuations
-Chinese Names Issues: Not all your readers know if a Chinese name is meant for a girl or a boy (and your names were a bit neutral too). I didn't realize which characters were male and female until the later chapters. Also, it's kinda weird how they call each other with their full names. I would think some of them might have nicknames. In fact, adding nicknames might make the story even more believable. (Xiao Huai~ Chang'er~, stuff like that LOL I suck at Chinese).
-Time, oh, time: You forget to describe the time aspects more concretely. I was frankly a bit confused about when the explosion would occur. And little things, too, like how they suddenly just jumped from the Hua Residence to the library. Fix it up a bit more for coherence.
And... that's about it? Improve it more and it can be a masterpiece. Super great job!)
Yanhua was a beautiful story full of gorgeous imagery and impressive character development. It also explores the profound questions of "what lengths would you go to to save your friends? Your family? The world?" Yanhua is one of the best stories I've read in a long time!
You, the author, have a clever use of words and the way you move them. The scenery and details flow smoothly elegant, and the characters feel more than human enough. The main character's determinism is well implemented.
Some scenes can be confusing at first, due to a little bit of lacking context, (especially the ones involving the fox), and sure sometimes the descriptions overextend a little bit. You also like to use the word "and".
But nothing critical nor anything that makes the story tedious nor fall dull and flat. This is a solid, smooth work we're talking about. Well done.
The writing style is unique and suited for the story. This is one of the only stories that make me want to read it. I'm not very much into reading but, this story makes me wanting to read it over and over. This really deserves a five star.
I will read them and leave a review !! Added to collection . I liked how synopsis is short and crisp though it makes the reader want to know more !! Good going.
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👏 👏 👏 Right from the very first chapter I already grasped the situation clearly. The description is very good that everything is understandable. The words can really make a movie in my imagination. You have great writing skills author. 👍👍👍😉
Wow, that was one hell of a short story. Wished it had more chapters. Like the authors writing, it's crisp and precise. The myriad of emotions have been portrayed well and the author has a gift to attract readers.
Kudos to the author for such a great story.
What a masterpiece author. You write so well..I really got hooked....👍👍👍 The characters and situations their struggle to live everything is so good. Your grammar is really good...👍👍 Why this is shory story....When MC got dream and his struggle starts, the fox everything is so good...kudos to author...👏👏👏
The story so good, I can't describe it, but you must read it. Especially the last chapter..ah.... recommend .. excellent author...hope you created another fantastic story again.
this story is a perfect example of how to properly write a story from start to finish never lost my attention. the way that the paragraphs are short and catching.
An awesome and short story with little to none grammar mistakes. The great and motivating writing allows for a smooth pace wonderful reading.
Well done.
Whoa, that was really good! after reading it, I wanted more. Great job author! To be honest it was so hard to pinpoint an error because it's perfect! I wish it was longer :(
very nice. wasnt expecting a short story, but it's an intriguing use of the webnovel medium. The character is very likeable, and the story serves it purpose perfectly.
Simple, fast, good and well writen.
Four things that describe this story perfectly, i enjoyed what I read but I was also left wanting more, but as it stands it's a good story and despite it's rather short size reading it, was a time well spent!
What a ride. That was short and sweet and it definitely leaves you wanting for more. I'm glad we're getting more short stories as it simply enhances the experience of wanting to savor something. Well written!
A perfect five. This story has a solid plot, the writing style flows better than a river, and the characters are so clearly distinguished even if there are just 7 chapters to this master piece.
One sacrificed himself for the others, and just one felt it could happen. He was the one who cared the most in the group, and that also shows something. His friend that foresaw his death was probably the one who understood him the best. I almost cried because I could understand the sentence: Because you care the most.
It's such a heavy thing to carry.
Thank you author, write things like these more.
The story is well written in an interesting world with good dialogue and character interactions. It's just been really, really good so far with relatable characters in relatable situations with an underlying tension that keeps building up more and more.
A very emotional story that has a big future coming from days forward. The author had managed to convey feelings for potential readers with perfect descriptions of the settings behind. A good read! Reccomend for all!
This hit me like a truck and sent me to euphoria. The very first paragraph is already well made and incredibly descriptive.
The technique used in the very first chapter was good. He's immediately in a dire state, hooking the readers to read further. There's only seven chapters, but I'm ready to read more.
A short and sweet story.. Reading the first chapter I thought this is some military background but proved wrong.. I wish author could have written more chapters but then it may not be this nice.. Keep up author I hope you can write more short stories like this.
Aww man... I wish you wrote more chapters! But I like this sooo much. A dream? Saving his friends? My favourite type of book! I love it! you did great!
The story is excellent, a short story with high potential. I loved the way the author represented the story, but I feel like there must be more chapters. honestly, I want more chapters written like this. I am waiting for the new works of the author.
The story has a really solid start and seems to go with a common theme but with a spin. I like the way the author writes the story, it flows very well. Only vice I would say is that its very short, felt like it could have been continued further.
Absolutely fabulous book. I highly recommend it.😍😍😍😍😍😍😍................................ I hope to read more chapters from this book which will be amazing 👏 .Keep up the good work.
It's really a good story. Your skills are very good and it's start with perfect. But why it's end so soon. I want more. Keep writing. It's really nice work. Good job.
I really like your writing style. Would it be okay if i take some tips? ♥️. Oberall, Well made story but too short. It's like having a bite of cotton candy. It just melts too fast but yet still tastes so good.
I’m sad it’s so short. Cuz honestly the world buildings and descriptions are so on point, characterization also, the way emotions and feelings are described are really great.
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