Ya the story was good at the begining but then it dragged on and i kinda got lost at the tower part so like i was very honest with my reveiw but i think itd be great if u started a brand new story not related to this one
i thought the system is the who bought him in the new butt heckk almost peopleee haveee a systemm too HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA that kindd off funny buttt wohhh this is nof forr meeee i thoughttt he is have intelect but my thought is wrongggggg booooooooooooooooooooooooooooboooooooooooooooooooooooooooo boooooooooooooooooooooooooooo boooooooooooooo booooooooo bobboobboobobobobob9b9b9growkwjajajajqjqkqkqkjqajajajjakqkqkqkqkqkajaajja
I love your story. I really do, but I felt like it became to ambitious. After the tower arc, I snapped. I felt really angry because I finally thought the MC can be happy....at least for a while. There were just too many unnecessary stuff. But then, you decided to just abandon it. I was really sad because I really love the MC and the rest of the crew as characters. They were endearing and the most importantly they feel human. I will still read the remake, but I'm not really expecting it because the last few chapters just completely destroyed my heart.
I don't even know where to start. The beginning was quite normal, but it seems that after the hero arrives in the city, the author takes LSD (or something similar) and starts writing. After the first meeting, agree to an unknown relationship? I'll take two. Finding yourself in an unfamiliar world, with an unfamiliar system of values and relationships, rush headlong to the aid of not knowing who, who introduced himself as "Goddess"? I agree to everything, but why not? And then get involved in some nonsense when the "goddess" actually usurps someone's body? Take the amount. And then I got scared and I decided to finish reading this work
Sorry, my English level is multiplied by 0
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I like stories like this, but the one complaint and I would recommend author consider this. "System" novels are over used and not very fun to read anymore. Very few of them do it right IMHO. I like the general story, but I woudl rather just read eastern fantasy cultivation novel than system update.
I enjoy this story to a moderate degree. it has interesting elements that I am quite partial too. the main thing I focus on when I read a story is the characters. the characters in this story are missing something. they're not as engaging and in depth as they could be. relationships between characters feel rushed, and shallow. they dont feel alive.
I do like the world building in this story. the gods are varied, and seem like well thought out characters, who suffer from god complexes(duh). they feel relatively substantial, as characters. they have long histories, and that shines through in some of the little details. the world itself seems unique when compared to other stories of this genre. there are somethings that could be fleshed out to make the world feel more lived in, but overall its interesting.
my final gripe, the M.C. the m.c is an assassin, as far as the system says, but in reality they are a wizard with stealth capabilities. I came into this story with some expectations. I hoped for a ruthless m.c who wield both magic and blade to kill their enemies. the M.C, atleast in the begging, seriously ignores the assassin title. she kills her enemies yes, but with stealth and magic. she might as well just be a scout, or thief. She specs hard into magic from the begging, and her assassin class is used almost purely for stealth capabilities. this isnt bad per say, but I was repeatedly disappointed as she specced more and more into magic, completely neglecting physical skills and abilities juthat should come with being an assassin.
the story isnt bad. it has good points. can be dark and gritty when necessary, and fluffy when expected. some things feel a bit rushed, and some characters can feel lackluster.
I'm not sure about the posting consistently of the author as I bulk read the story, and let chapters stack after reaching a certain point...
It started off really good and interesting, but the system seems to kinda jump around stat wise. I read up to chapter 139 and I would consider this story to have minor ntr. It's not explicit, but it's kinda there if you put 2 and 2 together.
Disappointing is the best description for this story. It’s a okay read(many plot holes though), but it cool have been WAY better, the sheer wasted potential makes the story feel worse than it is, read this if you need a way to kill time and is out of options.
Ps: To the Author: thank you for trying your best, I hope you can make a better use of your ideas in the future, because they’re good, just badly executed
I wanted to like it...but that's really hard.
It's hard to care about events when the MC doesn't. spontaneously evolve from a goblin to a dark elf, no problem. don't even question the blessing from a goddess you never interacted with that made it possible until she manipulates you so she can immediately wipe your memory.
a girl you're interested in suddenly gets possessed by a goddess that said her retaining any of her personality at all was only luck? time to go to the next level.
all of that while abilities are ignored entirely, serial killer despite being overpowered, treated as if they have no effect, insatiable being a trait compatible with monogamy but when said partner becomes an invalid target it's compatible with celibacy, or changed every ten chapters, all of her divine blessings. a God's mark can be claimed by another with no issue whatsoever, but a necromancer's mark is untouchable. zero recourse whatsoever.
the world was cool until dungeons became a thing. they're ranked, but capable of hosting creatures much more powerful than that rank if said creature feels like it should let them. they're distinct, unless they decide to link to mommy dungeon that is accessible from all dungeons and let's people in at random. they're false reflections of real creatures, except for sometimes they send you to a place sealed by a god or a hidden cave of a monster that knows a god personally, those times you're teleported to another location. they pick the difficulty based on your power, except when they don't feel like it.
the worst part, though, is the lack of permanence. going to be a poison wizard? can't do any other magic? nevermind, you can do shadow magic too. and non-attribute magic. and cleaning magic. you get a skill to use a sword, guess it's time to go back to pistols. objects bought from the system store are better because they're standardized, never mind it's an auction system.
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I understand that the rating I've given this novel seems to be more than what it deserves to some, maybe even to the author him/herself. but to me, this is much lower than it should be, however I will use blunt barebones honesty with one aspect involved with the rating I've given it. updating stability. real low. it's the only thing I have against this novel really, though, I believe I understand a little bit as to why its low and infrequent. I personally love this little novel, and at first thought it was just a run of the mill reincarnation story. and it started out that way. then, it quite literally leaped off the path and made it's own. to most, it would likely seem pointless, with them losing interest in it, not bothering to attempt to look deeper through its skin. if what the author wrote in their side story is real world events, then it makes even more sense. the story became lost, as did the author, both trying to find purpose, or in the authors case, inspiration and something to actually live for, something to strive to, that they might overcome something, some struggle, known and never forgotten, but accepted, and used to strengthen a formerly I'll maintained foundation. I realize I might be overstepping a few bounds as I write this review, but I don't think I can stop at this point. not willingly, and definitely not without agonizing over it for weeks, before doing it anyways. author, if your side story in this novel was indeed a real world event, I'm sorry for your losses, and I truly wish I could help, but the most I can do is this that you see here. maybe you've grown disheartened over this venture and decided to seal this path of exploration off from yourself, due to recent events, but even so, I managed to connect with this story on what is likely a much deeper and most certainly darker understanding than most. please, do not grow discouraged, attempt to overcome what fears you may have over certain things in life, attempt to use that memory of loss as a building block in the foundation of your person, and make with it something new. it doesn't have to be powerful, but as many authors I've read have said, humans best trait isn't just their willpower, but their adaptability to nigh everything. this novel is an amazing creation that needs little improvement, yet has so much potential, and not just in Yuri's paths, but the quality of this novel itself. I understand that it might seem rude, and it is undeniably selfish, yet I must request, please author, make more chapters. despite some of the reviews I've read, I feel there is indeed a purpose for this story. please, let it grow.
I've given three stars for the writing quality. There were some mistakes in grammar. Punctuation is also a big problem as there were comma misuses in the dialogues. Proofreading should do the trick if you were to ask me. Aside from this, the sentence structure feels weird and there are paragraphs which are too long.
Next, the stability of updates. I don't know what that means since I'm new to this website. Whether it means the author updates the chapter or releases chapters frequently, I'll be giving this a full on five.
When it comes to the story development, I've rated it two stars. Pacing shifts from slow to fast very often. There were some things that I didn't understand nor did I feel like it was necessary.
As for character design, I rated this five stars. Great, I love how the author describes the look of the characters. Nothing much to criticize here for the author has done an excellent job.
World Background is two stars for me since the descriptions when it comes here weren't really that vivid. I was unable to grasp how the places look like that much. They were really lacking details.
In total, I'm giving the book a 3.4 star rating.
The stories concept and design was pretty good but I feel like this at first the main character was focused on getting stronger and developing the later chapters cared more about her sexuality rather than her as a person while it was nice to see her express herself it became her character instead of part of her character in my opinion anyway
Author is often unassuming but which reader knew author's prowess in selecting and spinning magnetic words into fantastic chapters making up this oh-so-delicious tale as entitled. Thanks so much for such a delectable story. Expressions and mechanical accuracy have room for improvement to further enhance the vivid imagination of the tale.
Starts out intresting, howecer the writing quality tanks around chapter 15.
I wish that I could continue reading it but the constant spelling errors and almost nonsensical sentences kind of ruin the story for me.
I may pick the novel up again sometime in the future if the author gets around to editing the chapters instead of releasing something that seems a bit rushed.