Reviews of Return of the Anarchists (dropped) by ThePotatoKing - Webnovel

I haven’t read the entire book, but I read the first seven chapters and am comfortable reviewing. This is one of the better stories I’ve read on this site, well done. I will explain each category below. Writing Quality Everything is easy to read and understand for the most part. Most of my issues are small grammatical things like comma misuse. However, there are times that comma misuse makes things hard to understand. The classic example comes to mind of a kid talking to or about his grandpa: “Let’s eat, grandpa” (this is a kid talking to his grandpa and telling him it is time to eat) “Let’s eat grandpa” (this is a kid suggesting cannibalism) The only difference in the above is a comma. There were also times that paragraphs were broken up In strange spots, like the middle of a sentence. I get why the author did this, but it was distracting. I took a point away for the two reasons above. Lastly, the author never told me who was thinking, talking, or narrating. The perspective switched between second and third person. Dialog would be good, but it would take careful reading to decipher who said what. Than goodness the characters had different personalities, or I would never know who walk talking! Thoughts were in quotes, which was consistently done with single quotes so I let it slide. Still, it never said who was thinking! If two characters were in the same room, there were times it was confusing. These reasons lost another point from me. 3/5. Stability of Updating Automatic 5/5. I dislike the category... Story Development I like the story and where it is heading. Pacing was good! The author didn’t make the typical mistakes. The start was interesting and drew me in. It quickly got to the main plot. World building was integrated in a way that it wasn’t a block of boring text, for the most part. Where the author lost a point is actually for a lack of details about the story and motivation of the anarchists in the beginning. I felt that the opening was so vague. Things got more specific, but not enough for me. Also, a lot of the story was telling and not showing. I wish I could give a half point... a three is lower than deserved, but a four is too high... Still, it is progressing well. 4/5. (I rounded up for you) Character Design This was also well done. Characters were different from each other and unique. They had a lot of personality. Unfortunately, the author told us their personality rather than showing it. “He was cautious” rather than just having him do things cautiously. That is where the author lost a point for me. 4/5. World Background There was a lot of interesting lore in the new world. The author put a lot of thought into it. All the races have a backstory and the plot is tied with an entire history and prophecy! Great work. I took a point for general vagueness, and for the old world. The old world was so vague it was unnamed. I assume it was Earth/the real world, but it never said for sure. The hero of that word was also not named until we got to the new world. The MC called him “the hero” to his face! Then later it was like, oh yeah, his name is Adam. Haha. Either way, the new world was extremely well crafted, and that is where most of the story happens. 4/5.