Let me get this point out of the way, It's funny, it's hella fun to read for short I really liked it. Good luck author I'm expecting more to come, Kudos to you!
First of all, this made me laugh. It was a fun read and I really liked it. There wasn't much development in the first chapter: it was mostly worldbuilding. I tend to prefer 'escape from reality novels a lot and this is in my ball park. Keep up the good work.
The novel is written with detailed world-building and while there are a few mistakes, there will always be room for improvement for every book. It has great potential and only needs a lot of exposure. The flow of the story is smooth. Kudos to the author!
From what I've read so far you have a really unlimited imagination which is really good for an author, the story is not perfect so there's room for growth and improvement.
If anyone that likes virtual reality and would like to have a their imaginations spin then you can go ahead to try this book.
The ideas and world building were top-notched. You have such a creative imagination to make a good novel like this. With more exposure, this will become big. I like the characters and the plot. Also the flow was stable, not a bumpy ride for me 😁 Kudos! and good job!
Quality: High quality. No major errors that could affect the flow of the story.
Update: The author is doing a great job on this. Commendable. .
Story: Right from the introduction, the novel progresses without deviating from the main plot.
Characters: Well designed and thought out. Especially the MC.
World: The setting of the world is very good. The author's virtual world designs were on point. Characters, ways of life etc.
Overall: A great novel.
Maybe I'm biased but I quite like virtual reality gaming books, and this one has a unique twist in that its not based on some fantasy real but on the real world. I don't think I've ever seen a book do something like this and its so cool.
Imagine all the places that will be added in the future too! Imagine chernobyl landscape where they have to fight mutated monsters or they discover cthulhu underwater and they have to go in and nerf him.
Okay maybe I'm getting too excited, but imagine the possibilities! There's far too few chapters to get the full picture right now but what I see is good.
The grammar and details are all there too, i'd really love to see if they go on to have bigger weapons like tanks, missile launchers, sniper rifles etc but thats for later chapters.
Author should update more XD
Keep up the good work
BlindBandit