This is sort of early for a review but here I go.
Heres some stuff you could improve with the story^^
1-Write more details about what the enviroment, what weather it is and maybe some facts about the town? Like does a lot of people live there? Are the humans slaves and the vampires and all of those "rich"?
2- You can write some more info about the characters overall, like maybe how some of them look or what they are thinking and act like.
3- The story progresses very quickly, suddenly we are hopping 16 years into the future? It seems all too sudden after have read just a few chapters at most.
Conclusion- This book has a really good story overall, and has a lot of room for improvement, keep on going!
Too early for a concrete review but the characters are interesting, and the plot is somewhat unique. I just hope more chapters will come. You can also see mine if you like. "Ramesses The Ultimate" and "The Lost Pharaoh".
Jentegamer74