Fix your writting, interesting story and plot though. I hope you can turn this into an amazing story in the future, I counting on you to do so, your only problem is your writting and sentences. GOODLUCK . Also udate it more please :D
I currently am loving the story....but could you please get into more detail about what the character looks like? So that I can have a better imagination while reading :3 ty
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